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Old 02-26-2017, 11:47 AM   #1
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still clueless after all these years

and that seems to be the bulk of the fun


I think it's the tools. Might say toys
but a tool becomes a toy. Tools
might be the working class term to

take into captivity stray
or maybe not stray but napping
in one of those fuzzy places

we might call an indefinite
borderland; privacy muddy;
but to get back to the matter
or more like a slippery word,

pretty sure the origin is
a column that stretches miles.
How else to contain all those nouns,
meaning the noun is the homeland,
and has attempted to present lectures

but attendees do have better
things to do thus they would be more
like would-be lecture attendees.
Better to mop an orgasm
and crack a fresh foamy Miller.
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Old 02-27-2017, 06:35 PM   #2
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not quite the kitchen's freshest batch

sorting through a treasure trove
labeled jewels glinting sentiment,

the leaf on the verge
of leaving it all behind
for the sake of a flight
across the grove espies
the breeze; relief
washes in the rushing
as a desire
to court is born.

You see I am no heavyweight
and fancies were never
so grandiose, as you'll note
these gems do not shout
of secret seaside fantasies

-------

it is true my train
is ample in room
- so the reply
from the ambling breeze went.
I will warn you cities
have gone gloomy

just in case you were hoping to see one
and yes that means you may as well hop on
as long as you are not in a hurry

- clearly riding
is the single sane choice
as following would drive
any leaf nuts.
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Old 02-28-2017, 10:47 PM   #3
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I'm not built for reading the spooky shit

cherubic cheeks mold the slope
over which the sheen runs
so the face is frozen in the net
other contexts call a werewolf howl

and one may swear a phantom
surrounds the cottage with black breath
- okay it could be any color
but the subject's diary lettering

chillingly scratchy avers that
the hickory twigs, sick of the winter,
scratched on windows with terrible rhythm,
leaving naught to do that night but shiver.
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Old 03-01-2017, 02:00 AM   #4
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I'm not built for reading the spooky shit

cherubic cheeks mold the slope
over which the sheen runs
....
You're getting right back into the swing of things.
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Old 03-01-2017, 02:32 PM   #5
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You're getting right back into the swing of things.
Always been something about the atmosphere in these parts that stimulates like no other, like breathing lots of sweet literary fumes. Gotta try and make... hell, make something.
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Old 03-01-2017, 02:48 PM   #6
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welcome home, hmmnmm
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Old 03-01-2017, 03:22 PM   #7
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Always been something about the atmosphere in these parts that stimulates like no other, like breathing lots of sweet literary fumes. Gotta try and make... hell, make something.
I'm convinced this is the best place on the web to work on one's poems. We may not have the big workshops others do, but there's something about the nature of the site and the relative anonymity we have that allows people to be more open in what they attempt. It can have a very positive effect for me, like no other writing site can.
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Old 03-01-2017, 04:26 PM   #8
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I'm convinced this is the best place on the web to work on one's poems. We may not have the big workshops others do, but there's something about the nature of the site and the relative anonymity we have that allows people to be more open in what they attempt. It can have a very positive effect for me, like no other writing site can.
that I have a funny feeling we've had this kind of conversation before only verifies and maybe double-verifies that it is truer than ever. Maybe a word like Stimulation fits in here somewhere. Spark plugs get to sparking as they don't quite spark elsewhere.
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Old 03-01-2017, 04:32 PM   #9
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that storied and homey scent of bacon might've at last met its match
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Old 03-01-2017, 10:35 PM   #10
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I'm convinced this is the best place on the web to work on one's poems. We may not have the big workshops others do, but there's something about the nature of the site and the relative anonymity we have that allows people to be more open in what they attempt. It can have a very positive effect for me, like no other writing site can.
To rudely interject, as she nods vigorously, "ain't that the truth!!!" I haven't been to that many (five, to be exact) sites, and I keep coming back here as the best. It's supportive, intelligent, marred with little egotism among most. And quite welcoming.

Thank you again, to all. I am grateful. I never expected to find this group, right here.
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To rudely interject, as she nods vigorously, "ain't that the truth!!!" I haven't been to that many (five, to be exact) sites, and I keep coming back here as the best. It's supportive, intelligent, marred with little egotism among most. And quite welcoming.

Thank you again, to all. I am grateful. I never expected to find this group, right here.
While I did happen to be in the neighborhood, when I began to entertain the nagging question, "hm, wonder if I'd enjoy writing poetry?" it was here I dipped my toes. Might be the latitude. Wide. Very wide, the latitude. Been sitting here trying to imagine where a wider latitude may be, and can't imagine it.
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Old 03-02-2017, 11:45 AM   #12
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getting one of those feelings that the direction may try to stray and will end up with the upper hand - in other words, if a moderator wonders if this ought to not be relocated to the hangout, that might be a cool move.

Because I think I just discovered something that relates to a broader theme than poetry in such a strict poetic sense. But it needs testing - verification before divulging. Placeholder short version: environment/atmosphere may not be all, but I am as of a couple hours ago convinced it is a bigger player than often credited for.
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getting one of those feelings that the direction may try to stray and will end up with the upper hand - in other words, if a moderator wonders if this ought to not be relocated to the hangout, that might be a cool move.

Because I think I just discovered something that relates to a broader theme than poetry in such a strict poetic sense. But it needs testing - verification before divulging. Placeholder short version: environment/atmosphere may not be all, but I am as of a couple hours ago convinced it is a bigger player than often credited for.
Well hmmnmm (I like to write your name cause it took me so long to remember to put that "n" in the middle!), you have options. If you want to keep this as your poem/poem workshop thread and also have a more freewheeling thread in the Hangout you could:

1) Move this thread there and start a new poem oriented thread here;

2) Start a new thread in the Hangout and I could move the non-poem posts into it so we can continue those conversations without your poems getting lost in the midst of um people like me who blah blah ;

3) Leave this thread as is here; or

4) I dunno. You tell me.

I know that a new iteration of the blankie thread would be a hit, but sounds like you have something new up your sleeve.
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Old 03-02-2017, 03:27 PM   #14
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Well hmmnmm (I like to write your name cause it took me so long to remember to put that "n" in the middle!), you have options. If you want to keep this as your poem/poem workshop thread and also have a more freewheeling thread in the Hangout you could:

1) Move this thread there and start a new poem oriented thread here;

2) Start a new thread in the Hangout and I could move the non-poem posts into it so we can continue those conversations without your poems getting lost in the midst of um people like me who blah blah ;

3) Leave this thread as is here; or

4) I dunno. You tell me.

I know that a new iteration of the blankie thread would be a hit, but sounds like you have something new up your sleeve.
hm, how about leaving this to trickle away and open something in the Hangout, maybe a blankie iteration something or other.
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hm, how about leaving this to trickle away and open something in the Hangout, maybe a blankie iteration something or other.
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But ...... but .......... but ............ it's my blankie and I ain't sharing! Although come to think of it that could be fun under certain circumstances
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Old 03-02-2017, 11:53 PM   #17
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But ...... but .......... but ............ it's my blankie and I ain't sharing! Although come to think of it that could be fun under certain circumstances
Annie, your blankie is your blankie forever and ever and ever.
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Annie, your blankie is your blankie forever and ever and ever.
Thank you, it was there waiting for me all that time
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If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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