Bizarre Exhib. Fantasy, comments welcome

Other than a few experiments, this is the first story I've ever written:

The Nude Pioneer, Chapter 1:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=342101

Chapter 2:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=343601

Chapter 3a:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=345622

Chapter 3b:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=346730

The biggest beef that readers have with stories of public nudity is the whole "yeah, right, if they really did that, they'd be arrested," complaint. So as a device to introduce some more realistic public nudity, I've set this story in a future world in which public nudity has been legalized, but the culture is basically the same as we know it today.

I'm striving for a heavy dose of realism (despite this being a fantasy world), and real characters, motivations, and conflicts. I know this can sometimes get in the way of eroticism, but they are really important to me.

As the story progresses, I want to explore the difference between "nude" and "naked." Simple nudity, which is not necessarily sexual in nature, and nakedness, being exposed where it may not be appropriate to be so, and the sexual excitement that results from this. I also want to explore how both nudity and nakedness can play a positive role in self-discovery and personal liberation, not just for my main character, but for others around her.

I'm banging out these chapters pretty quickly, so they might not be the most technically polished

Anyway, any comments (positive or "constructive") would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks!
-ARW

You know, I think you write a damned fine stick. I'd read your series before, but I went back and re-read before responding. I also voted on each of the chapters--problem is, I can't remember whether I'd voted before, so my apologies if I did and the sweeps catch the duplicate votes.

Anyway... I've really got nothing but praise. You handle dialogue very well, you've got excellent character development, very good pacing, and a Puckish sense of humor that I quite enjoyed. You can also handle both early and late points of attack in your stories, something that challenges most Lit authors.

I found your future world convincing because you unobtrusively buttressed the picture you were painting by adding touches such as switching to the metric system and the Celsius scale, putting gas at over $3 per liter, and adding high-speed rail service in an area of the country that I doubt has it right now. I particularly liked the touches of "beaming" contact info from one phone to another and tobacco being illegal to sell but not for private use.

So, in all, excellent job!

A few quibbles... the champagne that pops is not the Champaign of Illinois, unless it's a brand with which I'm not familiar (told you it was a quibble).

More seriously, I found it slightly implausible that your story features several horny young males that treat naked women/girls with the utmost respect. I wish it weren't implausible, but there you have it. *sigh*

I look forward to the next stories you publish.