Old 02-19-2014, 09:39 PM   #1851
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Thank you, tod, for your kind words and insight on my 1-8. The disruption you mentioned, at the end, was something that bothered me when I wrote it, but now, considering your words, it does seem to reinforce what is being said (beauty, slipping away).

It's unfortunate, but it seems I couldn't write a form poem anymore if my life depended on it. So, I'm happy when I imbue rhythm or manage a few internal rhymes.

What words would you cut? My own attempt resulted in two words being cut, on lines 1 and 2, but elsewhere I couldn't do it without feeling like removing the line altogether.
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Old 02-19-2014, 09:41 PM   #1852
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What a mess this song theme is going to be... I'm thinking that it's perhaps more trouble than it's worth. Went with a medley this time.
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Old 02-23-2014, 10:53 AM   #1853
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^^^^ I love that track, and I haven't heard it for ages.

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Old 02-23-2014, 11:00 AM   #1854
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^^^^ I love that track, and I haven't heard it for ages.
I moved you over here, hope you don't mind.

I actually did dream someone kept saying "Blue Rondo a la Turk" to me last night, so when I got up this morning I had to listen to it. It is marvelous, isn't it?
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Old 02-23-2014, 11:06 AM   #1855
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I moved you over here, hope you don't mind.

I actually did dream someone kept saying "Blue Rondo a la Turk" to me last night, so when I got up this morning I had to listen to it. It is marvelous, isn't it?


Ah-ha! Is that what happened? I thought I was loosing my grip on space-time for one minute

Of course I don't mind, I am, though, in awe of your moderation powers.

Fantastic piece from a true great. It's a shame he left us, but thank you for reminding me of it.
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Old 02-23-2014, 11:13 AM   #1856
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Ah-ha! Is that what happened? I thought I was loosing my grip on space-time for one minute

Of course I don't mind, I am, though, in awe of your moderation powers.

Fantastic piece from a true great. It's a shame he left us, but thank you for reminding me of it.
You're most welcome. And honest I just clicked a few times...t'weren't nuthin.

The music link in my sig line is my personal favorite Brubeck composition, albeit performed in this case by the Miles Davis Quintet. Nice to see you in 30/30 btw.
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Old 02-23-2014, 11:44 AM   #1857
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You're most welcome. And honest I just clicked a few times...t'weren't nuthin.

The music link in my sig line is my personal favorite Brubeck composition, albeit performed in this case by the Miles Davis Quintet. Nice to see you in 30/30 btw.
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Old 02-25-2014, 02:16 PM   #1858
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Hm... I'm feeling like dropping the 30 in 30 this time around. There is a disconnect between the things I want to write and the things I can write right now. Feels like swimming against the tide, threatening to drown me.
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Old 02-25-2014, 02:27 PM   #1859
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Hm... I'm feeling like dropping the 30 in 30 this time around. There is a disconnect between the things I want to write and the things I can write right now. Feels like swimming against the tide, threatening to drown me.
I'll still love you if you drop out for now. Poetry is work but we gotta love it too, right?

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Old 02-27-2014, 07:40 PM   #1860
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To Serve Man*

What do you mean it's a cookbook?



*Thank you, Rod Serling
Hahaha! Excellent. Twilight Zone, right? I think I saw that once. I should hunt it down, it looks fun.
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Old 02-27-2014, 07:49 PM   #1861
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Hahaha! Excellent. Twilight Zone, right? I think I saw that once. I should hunt it down, it looks fun.
Yup. One of my favorite episodes--so campy!

I'm exploring this whole idea of how to tell a story in very few words. At present it is easier for me to summarize stories I already know to try and understand it, hence the Twilight Zone one.

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Remec, Angeline, awesome!

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Old 03-08-2014, 01:41 PM   #1863
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Remec, Angeline, awesome!

Nice work you two
Another convert to the diminished hexaverse.
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Old 03-08-2014, 01:50 PM   #1864
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Another convert to the diminished hexaverse.
I seem to have a thing about counting syllables.
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Another convert to the diminished hexaverse.
Sounds like a star trec episide
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Old 03-08-2014, 04:58 PM   #1866
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Sounds like a star trec episide
And now, Vogon poetry... I'm trying to figure out a way to come up with some absurd words in English.
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And now, Vogon poetry... I'm trying to figure out a way to come up with some absurd words in English.
Oh make up your own a'la Jaberwookie
Camon you habby noozers
kapeet my creasin poobers
fill my foomp wit passy loovers
my moof wit massy bickies

as song on the tube "Akosha Farewell" I think sweet fiddle
just a single instrument haunting
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Old 03-08-2014, 05:21 PM   #1868
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Oh make up your own a'la Jaberwookie
Camon you habby noozers
kapeet my creasin poobers
fill my foomp wit passy loovers
my moof wit massy bickies

as song on the tube "Akosha Farewell" I think sweet fiddle
just a single instrument haunting
*applause*

Seriously. The Vogon poem is far more difficult for me than a sestina.
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I am so not trying to write a poem in Klingon next! Actually when I saw the Vogon example, I immediately thought of jabberwocky, too. Otherwise, believe me, I would not have even tried.
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Old 03-08-2014, 06:16 PM   #1870
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I am so not trying to write a poem in Klingon next! Actually when I saw the Vogon example, I immediately thought of jabberwocky, too. Otherwise, believe me, I would not have even tried.
*Googles jabberwocky*

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Old 03-08-2014, 06:39 PM   #1871
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*Googles jabberwocky*

Oh.
This has got to be difficult for someone not writing in their native language. Are you sure you want to follow my dumb lead?

(My son is very impressed that I wrote something in Vogon though!)
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Old 03-08-2014, 06:44 PM   #1872
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This has got to be difficult for someone not writing in their native language. Are you sure you want to follow my dumb lead?

(My son is very impressed that I wrote something in Vogon though!)
difficult's the understatement

he's not the only one
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he's not the only one
I just read it to eagleyez and he said it's one of the reasons he loves me. But then he's pretty weird himself.
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Old 03-08-2014, 07:09 PM   #1874
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This has got to be difficult for someone not writing in their native language. Are you sure you want to follow my dumb lead?

(My son is very impressed that I wrote something in Vogon though!)
Oh, I was thinking of doing something else, but now it's a matter of geek honor...
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I just read it to eagleyez and he said it's one of the reasons he loves me. But then he's pretty weird himself.
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