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Old 02-01-2012, 10:45 AM   #1
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I'd like someone to read a bit of something.

I'd love for someone to read something I have going. Not to edit, but to see what emotions the story evokes, what you're picturing, what there needs to be more of, less of, what it reminds you of, etc, etc.

Volunteers? I promise you won't be disappointed.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Old 02-01-2012, 11:24 AM   #2
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Old 02-01-2012, 11:26 AM   #3
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I do. I'll PM it along.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Old 02-01-2012, 11:34 AM   #4
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Old 02-01-2012, 11:44 AM   #5
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I'm very interested to see what reactions I get. I suppose it's a bit like a focus group for my work in progress.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Old 02-01-2012, 11:48 AM   #6
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I'm very interested to see what reactions I get. I suppose it's a bit like a focus group for my work in progress.
A focus group in the AH? Haven't you been following the threads here?
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Old 02-01-2012, 11:49 AM   #7
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A focus group in the AH? Haven't you been following the threads here?
You're right. What was I thinking?

A scattered brain group. That's what I meant.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Old 02-01-2012, 12:50 PM   #10
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Sent, and sent.

I want to say thank you to everyone who has read/is reading right now. I've gotten great feedback and some good suggestions to think about.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Old 02-01-2012, 01:10 PM   #12
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I'd be happy to read it as well and comment if you have not been too deluged!!
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Old 02-01-2012, 01:49 PM   #13
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Old 02-01-2012, 04:38 PM   #14
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You're right. What was I thinking?

A scattered brain group. That's what I meant.
take advantage of mine too, then, if you still need scattered brains.
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Old 02-14-2012, 08:35 PM   #15
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Focus groupies, I still owe some of you PM's. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and respond with your thoughts. I haven't made all my editing changes yet (since I'd like to get through the first draft and actually FINISH it), but I am keeping notes and have saved all PM's to AbiWord.

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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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I'd love for someone to read something I have going. Not to edit, but to see what emotions the story evokes, what you're picturing, what there needs to be more of, less of, what it reminds you of, etc, etc.

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take advantage of mine too, then, if you still need scattered brains.
Stella, one thing I have learned you ain't is scatterbrained.
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Stella definitely isn't scatter brained. She knows exactly what she's doing with her brain. And my gods is it ever erotic.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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Darling HP, I've sent you the latest copy. Thank you.
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"Part of being a minority is living with the majorities will no matter how it may be imposed on you. With that comes having to 'take what you can get' in order to make any advancement. Advancement to the exact same rights and personal freedoms you've had since birth and which are still to this day denied to us because we love differently."
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I'd love for someone to read something I have going. Not to edit, but to see what emotions the story evokes, what you're picturing, what there needs to be more of, less of, what it reminds you of, etc, etc.

Volunteers? I promise you won't be disappointed.

Spectacularly well asked.

You've already got your volunteers. And if you're any good? You're on your way. If you're not 'immediately' good? that's not a good reason to stop.

Sorry I'm late. You're already ahead.
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Old 02-19-2012, 11:52 AM   #22
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Spectacularly well asked.

You've already got your volunteers. And if you're any good? You're on your way. If you're not 'immediately' good? that's not a good reason to stop.

Sorry I'm late. You're already ahead.
Thank you I've been writing for a while, and I like to think I have some talent. It's what I love to do. In the past, the case has been that I reach a certain point, doubt myself, and stop, but I'm not letting that happen this time. This is something I want to finish and publish, and so it is...I keep soldiering on.
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