Old 07-22-2015, 03:37 AM   #1
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Flow

http://www.writersdigest.com/qp7-mig...iction-excerpt

I think this teacher misses the boat with FLOW.

To my way of thinking flow happens when writers express complexity with simple words and eliminate word clutter.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QmWkEpC7hkA

This is a good example of flow. Note how the left hand plays the same chords almost all the way to the end. Real simple rhythm. And rhythm is kinda what flow is.

Another tutorial to make the point:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AgR2ppyichs
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Old 07-22-2015, 04:12 AM   #2
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tdq5jSL8kR4

How concrete words and abstract words influence rhythm and create flow.
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Old 07-22-2015, 03:43 PM   #3
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I read part of the first essay JBJ linked to. The DH Lawrence bit was descriptive, but seemed too wordy to me. Possibly it's a time thing, the language changes and, for me, many of the older classics, while they might tell a good story, just don't sound right.

As for flow in general. I can't do it. So I disguise that fact in some of my stories by sticking to a deliberately choppy and broken up style.
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Old 07-23-2015, 01:30 AM   #4
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I can't help feeling that if D H Lawrence was around today he would write more in the manner of Kurt Vonnegut.
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