Old 09-12-2012, 11:29 AM   #1
Andrea74
Experienced
 
Andrea74 is offline
Join Date: Sep 2012
Posts: 41
Poem I wrote last year...

hychckhfckhcggclgcugclccgl ogucolugclucglucglucgl tuocucgolucgugc
__________________
Love is the drug

Last edited by Andrea74 : 09-14-2012 at 01:17 AM.
  Reply With Quote

Old 09-12-2012, 01:46 PM   #2
twelveoone
ground zero
 
twelveoone is offline
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 5,836
q. why do you think this is poetry?
don't misunderstand me, some of it if beautiful, some poetic. it just looks, feels and operates as prose
i am missing a next level, where is it?
as it is if this was submitted over in new poems i would have given it a 4, or 5, it would have been a bell curve score, because so much over there is crap and this is better than that
poetry must have either a level underneath, an interrelation with all the words, a structure either internal or external
i could be missing something, if so what is it?
in short to write it, you have to read it, there are some wonderful people here. they can help, but you have to make an effort also
  Reply With Quote

Old 09-12-2012, 11:03 PM   #3
Andrea74
Experienced
 
Andrea74 is offline
Join Date: Sep 2012
Posts: 41
u6rdirydrydoty 90p87p7pt87p86 -97tp97trfpr9
__________________
Love is the drug

Last edited by Andrea74 : 09-14-2012 at 01:18 AM.
  Reply With Quote

Old 09-15-2012, 04:53 PM   #4
CharleyH
Curioser and curiouser
 
CharleyH's Avatar
 
CharleyH is offline
Join Date: May 2003
Location: The rabbit hole
Posts: 16,649
Quote:
Originally Posted by twelveoone View Post
q. why do you think this is poetry?
don't misunderstand me, some of it if beautiful, some poetic. it just looks, feels and operates as prose
i am missing a next level, where is it?
as it is if this was submitted over in new poems i would have given it a 4, or 5, it would have been a bell curve score, because so much over there is crap and this is better than that
poetry must have either a level underneath, an interrelation with all the words, a structure either internal or external
i could be missing something, if so what is it?
in short to write it, you have to read it, there are some wonderful people here. they can help, but you have to make an effort also
Apparently, some people just can't handle critique. Too bad. I didn't get the opportunity to read the poem, but I think your words to the poet, while harsh, may have been enlightening.
  Reply With Quote

Old 09-15-2012, 08:27 PM   #5
twelveoone
ground zero
 
twelveoone is offline
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 5,836
Quote:
Originally Posted by CharleyH View Post
Apparently, some people just can't handle critique. Too bad. I didn't get the opportunity to read the poem, but I think your words to the poet, while harsh, may have been enlightening.
not that way at all, an understanding of mutual non-interest

don't misunderstand me, some of it if beautiful, some poetic. it just looks, feels and operates as prose


in short to write it, you have to read it, there are some wonderful people here. they can help, but you have to make an effort also

came back, realized there is a little more to it, everything was cordial. critique was handled well on their part

it is a common conception that anyone can write poetry, so they do. unlike guitar playing where the wretchedness of the start is easily apparent, poetry always makes "sense" to the writer.

after five years of practice a guitar player can make it, and after 10 years if he don't, he can always play in bars.

after after five years of thought and practice a poet should realize he's a shithead, and after 10 either behind them or at least in one.
  Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 07:13 PM.

Copyright 1998-2013 Literotica Online. Literotica is a registered trademark.