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Old 08-01-2016, 07:00 PM   #1
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Same Five Senses Challenge

Welcome to August, poets. This challenge comes with a tip of the hat and thank you to Piscator for the idea. /thumbs up emoticon/

In this challenge you write a poem that must be built around the following five senses:

Sight: white caps
Sound: flags flapping
Taste: cinnamon
Smell: french fries
Touch: wind

Q&A:

Q. Do I have to use those exact words?
A. ____No. You can use them if you want but if you can find a way to convey the taste of cinnamon (for example) without using the word, go for it! Just be sure your readers will understand that you meant "cinnamon."

Q. Can't some words be interpreted different ways?
A. ____Yup. "White caps" is a good example of that. If it works in your poem, it doesn't matter which way you choose to interpret it.

Q. Can I write a sonnet/triolet/free verse/paradelle/etc., if I want?
A. ____Yes. Whatever floats your boat.

Q. Can I send more than one poem?
A. ____Sure.


If you choose to participate, you'll have until 9:00 am Eastern Standard Time on August 16th to submit poems. That's a little over two weeks from now. Submit your poems via private message to The Poets. All poems will be posted without authors' names on the 16th. You'll get to see them all at once, but will have some time to try to guess who wrote what.

Have a go at it! These "same" challenges work well with more participants so I hope you can join in!

Feel free to talk or ask questions in this thread. The poems will be posted in a separate poems-only thread on the 16th.
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Old 08-01-2016, 10:32 PM   #2
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Waiting for Magnetron to have a touch of the wind!
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-02-2016, 08:04 AM   #3
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Waiting for Magnetron to have a touch of the wind!
As clumsy as I am, I just might break the wind.
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Old 08-02-2016, 11:24 AM   #4
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As clumsy as I am, I just might break the wind.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-02-2016, 02:00 PM   #5
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I don't think hitting him there's going to help!
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Old 08-02-2016, 02:45 PM   #6
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Geez. One day and this thread has spanking and farting. That may be a record.
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Geez. One day and this thread has spanking and farting. That may be a record.
It's your fault, I couldn't let a touch of the wind pass!
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-02-2016, 09:47 PM   #8
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I don't think hitting him there's going to help!
This forum needs a 'Like' button
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-02-2016, 10:22 PM   #9
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It's your fault, I couldn't let a touch of the wind pass!
I'm sure we're all hoping it doesn't pass.
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I'm sure we're all hoping it doesn't pass.
Keep upwind of Magnetron

Ooops that sounds even ruder than intended!
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-03-2016, 12:17 AM   #11
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Since my nose doesn't work, I let yawl be the judge of that.
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Old 08-08-2016, 01:54 PM   #13
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Bumping this thread to remind everyone that you still have about a week to submit for this challenge. We only have five poems so far, so let's see if we can get up to around ten (or more!).

Just write a poem using these five senses:

Sight: white caps
Sound: flags flapping
Taste: cinnamon
Smell: french fries
Touch: wind



and send it to The Poets, which is a moderators' account here on the pobo. You have until 9:00 am Eastern Standard Time on August 16th to submit them. I'll post them all on the 16th without names so you have some time to guess the authors and give feedback if you like. Multiple submissions are welcome!
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Old 08-08-2016, 04:29 PM   #14
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I just spent a week in the great outdoors, but now I am back on duty and you will be hearing from me shortly.
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I just spent a week in the great outdoors, but now I am back on duty and you will be hearing from me shortly.
Excellent. You'll be inspired.
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Old 08-09-2016, 04:05 PM   #16
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Not having written anything in weeks now, I've resigned myself to the fact that this one is going to write itself at the last fucking minute.
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Not having written anything in weeks now, I've resigned myself to the fact that this one is going to write itself at the last fucking minute.
Dwells upon the phrase 'last fucking minute' and I'm sure something will cum to me soon ...........
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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A metaphor that somehow joins the taste of cinnamon with the smell of French fries -- this may be the most difficult challenge ever.
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I knew there was a legitimate reason why I've never posted in the 5 Senses thread.



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Coming down to the wire.

Who'da thunk I'd have so much trouble writing one poem.
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Coming down to the wire.

Who'da thunk I'd have so much trouble writing one poem.
You have till midnight tonight, EST, but I won't post anything until tomorrow so you really have some extra time.
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Old 08-15-2016, 08:45 PM   #22
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Last Call!

Or as T.S. Eliot said in The Waste Land:

HURRY UP PLEASE ITS TIME
HURRY UP PLEASE ITS TIME
Goonight Bill. Goonight Lou. Goonight May. Goonight.
Ta ta. Goonight. Goonight.
Good night, ladies, good night, sweet ladies, good night, good night.



Thank you all for the submissions thus far; there has been a flurry of them this afternoon and we have a lovely group of takes on the same senses. I will post them tomorrow, probably in the afternoon cause I have stuff to do in the morning...so there's still time (but not much!). To you revisers (most of you lol--we poets do love to tinker), I have all your revisions!

I'll post poems in a separate thread and you can also discuss and critique there.


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A metaphor that somehow joins the taste of cinnamon with the smell of French fries -- this may be the most difficult challenge ever.
And yet, it would seem that someone has solved that problem without using a metaphor.
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Angie, the title of your post looks like "Last Calli" at first glance. It amused me, because I'm such a procrastinator.
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Angie, the title of your post looks like "Last Calli" at first glance. It amused me, because I'm such a procrastinator.
You were not last.
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