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Old 12-22-2003, 07:47 PM   #1
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A q to those who know their formulas

I just yanked together another poem and submitted it, a rather intricate structured one (to come from for me, that is). I was just wondering, is this format new, or is there a name for it? And if not, can I call it... oh, I don't know... 'Bob'?

Here are the first four stanzas, gives you the idea. The stanzas rhymes in pairs, and evey stanza nicks the first line from the 3rd of the previous one. It was remarkably easy to write for a guy who tosses the cookies when trying a villanelle or suchlike.


Handshake, handover,
the same old agenda,
a lowride of commas
repeating in order.

A lowride of commas
with tidals of notion,
a call-response pattern
through distance and border.

A call-response pattern,
transmitter, receiver,
projector and canvas
in communication.

Projector and canvas
aligned with a signal,
a perfect clear image,
a photon vocation.



Yah, it's cryptic. But it continues...and hopfully makes sense in the end.
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Old 12-22-2003, 09:03 PM   #2
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hmmmm. well the interlocking rubyiat pulls line 1 of the new stanza from line 3 of the previous one, but aside from that ya got me. I'm not familiar with any form that uses that rhyme scheme, not that i'm so great with trad forms. Mayhap you just made it up?
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Old 12-22-2003, 09:08 PM   #3
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I thought it looked familiar and tried to find the form online, but didn't. It seems to be similar to several forms, but... I guess it's a Bob.
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Old 12-22-2003, 09:29 PM   #4
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My first Bob!

it was fun, too.


fourscore, nevermore
another short day passes
all's right with punctuation
sentences flow pretty fly

All's right with punctuation
grammar served under glass
subject calls for predicate
clarity makes me cry

Subject calls for predicate
eventually the stanzas grow
who can really comprehend
what artists need to say

Who can really comprehend
bend trends--no matter
love every artful twist
it's a poem anyway
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Old 12-22-2003, 09:31 PM   #5
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hmmmm. well the interlocking rubyiat pulls line 1 of the new stanza from line 3 of the previous one, but aside from that ya got me. I'm not familiar with any form that uses that rhyme scheme, not that i'm so great with trad forms. Mayhap you just made it up?
Yeah, I did. Or rather, it just snaked up and bit me in the arse. But it seemed so - well - simple and IMO workesd so well, that I thought it must have bitten someone else before.

Until further notice, it's a Bob.
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Old 12-22-2003, 09:36 PM   #6
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Has it come to this? Will there be Bob challenges in the future? Will one of us be known as the Master of the Bob form? Maybe there will be a Bob forum. Perhaps, a modified Bob called a Bobbet or Bobbanelle. Well, damn it! I must now write a Bob!
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Old 12-22-2003, 09:48 PM   #7
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Has it come to this? Will there be Bob challenges in the future? Will one of us be known as the Master of the Bob form? Maybe there will be a Bob forum. Perhaps, a modified Bob called a Bobbet or Bobbanelle. Well, damn it! I must now write a Bob!
Yes! Yes! Everyone get in here and do the Bob. Not you Ice, you inventor you. Go to sleep. You're getting as bad as Lauren.
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Old 12-22-2003, 10:15 PM   #8
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Currents (an interlocked Bob)

Dreams float on the river of my mind,
A vague impression of thought,
Whispered kisses alight on your lips,
As I send them with my song.

Whispered kisses alight on your lips,
Pressed sensually to your skin,
A gentle touch that guides my hand,
As we explore the wonder that is you.

A gentle touch that guides my hand,
When your need supplants your thoughts,
As you hunger for more than promises,
And your body demands release.

As you hunger for more than promises,
Satisfaction will come with time,
Dreams float on the river of my mind,
As we take the wondrous journey.

Dreams float on the river of my mind,
Whispered kisses alight on your lips,
A gentle touch that guides my hand,
As you hunger for more than promises.
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Old 04-29-2006, 12:19 PM   #9
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I'm bumping this thread

Bump!

I've noticed bobs mentioned a couple of times with the noobs asking, "What the fuck is a bob?"

Here ya go... explanation from the inventor
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Old 04-29-2006, 02:06 PM   #10
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I'm bumping this thread

Bump!

I've noticed bobs mentioned a couple of times with the noobs asking, "What the fuck is a bob?"

Here ya go... explanation from the inventor
Dang You, Champ! I saw the thread title and the author, but not the date, and thought my day was made because one of my favorite pair of poets had returned after a long hiatus.

I miss Ice and Lin. I hope they are happy wherever they are.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Bobbing up again
Thanks for bumping this thread. Interesting form. The focus on repetition reminds me of a sestina.
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Thanks for bumping this thread. Interesting form. The focus on repetition reminds me of a sestina.
Reminds me of a Pantoum
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I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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