Old 06-21-2016, 08:07 PM   #1
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Well I just hit submit on my first poem submission. I'm nervous as hell. Why am I so nervous?
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Old 06-21-2016, 08:37 PM   #2
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Well I just hit submit on my first poem submission. I'm nervous as hell. Why am I so nervous?
It's different when you show your poetry. You have taken a very concentrated version of a story you wrote and put it out there for all to see. That's nerve wracking.

Post a link to the poem, please that we may read it. Let us know if you would like feedback, review or just a simple like/dislike from your readers. Thank you and Welcome to the PF&D
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Old 06-21-2016, 08:54 PM   #3
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It's different when you show your poetry. You have taken a very concentrated version of a story you wrote and put it out there for all to see. That's nerve wracking.

Post a link to the poem, please that we may read it. Let us know if you would like feedback, review or just a simple like/dislike from your readers. Thank you and Welcome to the PF&D
When I hit submit it said it was pending...how do I find it now?
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Old 06-21-2016, 09:01 PM   #4
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This link should take you to your Submissions page, good luck and welcome

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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 06-21-2016, 09:07 PM   #5
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Ok so I see it but it doesn't look like it's "gone public" yet....
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Old 06-21-2016, 09:08 PM   #6
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Well anyhoo: Here's the poem:

What a shame you didn't take the time to really get to know me.

You only saw what you wanted to see.

But I'm so much more than one dimension one side

And there's so much that I'm just forced to hide.

I tried to show you bits and pieces of who I really am

but you pushed that aside like you didn't give a damn

you only saw the married mother of three

you didn't see the other facets of me

the things that make me truly unique

you see you only got a small peek

into the Windows of my soul

I wasn't going to let you see the whole

not until I was sure you weren't going to use me

but you turned around and then proved to me

that I was right to keep my guard up

because you were just stealing the kindness from my cup

I offered you my friendship with open mind and heart

No hidden agendas or plots from the start

You blocked me pushed me away

And left me hanging with so much left to say

But I've grown more since then I'm so much stronger

I find myself not even missing you any longer.

now I sit and think of what you missed and smile.

Because you have no clue. Not by a mile.
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Old 06-21-2016, 09:16 PM   #7
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It takes a few days, so best to check daily if it's been accepted and posted.
Rhyming couplets I see, not many people around here write Forms but never fear I do at every opportunity!
Are you seeking critique or comments?
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 06-21-2016, 09:20 PM   #8
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Why not? LOL I wrote what came into my brain at the moment....I have "non rhyming" stuff too (Free form?). I just wrote what I felt. I was well...angry at the time lol.
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Old 06-21-2016, 10:11 PM   #9
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Well anyhoo: Here's the poem:

What a shame you didn't take the time to really get to know me.

You only saw what you wanted to see.

But I'm so much more than one dimension one side

And there's so much that I'm just forced to hide.

I tried to show you bits and pieces of who I really am

but you pushed that aside like you didn't give a damn

you only saw the married mother of three

you didn't see the other facets of me

the things that make me truly unique

you see you only got a small peek

into the Windows of my soul

I wasn't going to let you see the whole

not until I was sure you weren't going to use me

but you turned around and then proved to me

that I was right to keep my guard up

because you were just stealing the kindness from my cup

I offered you my friendship with open mind and heart

No hidden agendas or plots from the start

You blocked me pushed me away

And left me hanging with so much left to say

But I've grown more since then I'm so much stronger

I find myself not even missing you any longer.

now I sit and think of what you missed and smile.

Because you have no clue. Not by a mile.
Written for just one person?

Feel better now?
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Old 06-21-2016, 10:37 PM   #10
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Written for just one person?

Feel better now?
Yes and Yes. I also had another encounter with this person...and got have my "HA" moment where his jaw totally dropped and he told me i was looking "Damn good" I said "I know but thanks" and walked away. After all the shit he put me through (and I just wanted to be a friend mind you) it was AWESOME that I FINALLY got that moment.
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Old 06-21-2016, 11:09 PM   #11
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Yes and Yes. I also had another encounter with this person...and got have my "HA" moment where his jaw totally dropped and he told me i was looking "Damn good" I said "I know but thanks" and walked away. After all the shit he put me through (and I just wanted to be a friend mind you) it was AWESOME that I FINALLY got that moment.
Facets?

I think your understated confidence is very powerful
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Old 06-22-2016, 12:22 AM   #12
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congrats

that's awesome.
you're nervous cause you want people to like what you've done, is my guess.
but the fact that you submitted is the great victory.
keep writing. just because.
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Facets?

I think your understated confidence is very powerful
Yes Facets.

fac·et
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noun
plural noun: facets
one side of something many-sided, especially of a cut gem.
synonyms: surface, face, side, plane
"the many facets of the gem"
a particular aspect or feature of something.
"participation by the laity in all facets of church life"
synonyms: aspect, feature, side, dimension, characteristic, detail, point, ingredient, strand; More
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Old 06-22-2016, 06:13 AM   #14
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It could stand to have a word trimmed here and there, but otherwise it is quite focused for an emotional outpouring. This is a good poem.
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To be true Couplets the lines should be of the same metre/length of course.
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 06-22-2016, 07:58 PM   #16
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Yes Facets.

fac·et
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noun
plural noun: facets
one side of something many-sided, especially of a cut gem.
synonyms: surface, face, side, plane
"the many facets of the gem"
a particular aspect or feature of something.
"participation by the laity in all facets of church life"
synonyms: aspect, feature, side, dimension, characteristic, detail, point, ingredient, strand; More
Trust me, I know the meaning of 'facets.' I was hoping you'd share a glimpse of your personality and passions

I've very aware of sarcasm as well . . .
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It's officially up and live!

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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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