Seeking feedback on my first story posted

Hey, I posted the first part of a story I wrote describing a really, really, fun day I had wherein I "play" with my kinky lesbian mistress, my mom, and my fellow lesbian slave, my sister. There's bdsm, pissing, rimming, lesbianism (duh) and incest (didn't see that coming). I'd really, really love to know if anyone thinks I should post the rest of the day, or other days. Please, please read and give me feedback, oh and if you want a reply to a question or something then put your email address in along with the feedback or question. Thank you A link is right below. Enjoy.

https://www.literotica.com/s/my-kinky-life-stories