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Old 04-08-2018, 05:24 PM   #576
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Cal Y. Pygia is back on Lit with several new submissions, all of which I think are well written.

I particularly liked "Hard and Solid."

https://www.literotica.com/p/hard-and-solid
Yes, I enjoyed "Hard and Solid." Apparently the author has closed her poem to comments, or I would have left a compliment.
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Old 05-22-2018, 12:26 AM   #577
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a Muslim poetess maketh waves in NPs: her ' Bisexual Muslim boys' , Hijaab Sluts and Muslim gal into Big White Dick are sensational and shd be made must reading for ISIS jihadis and suicide bombers!!!!
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Old 05-30-2018, 12:46 PM   #578
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Helping Hand by erectus123 brings the poem full circle, it's a bit unsettling that line 5 has no rhyme which interrupts what is otherwise a smooth read.
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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Old 05-30-2018, 01:10 PM   #579
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Fetish Limericks 12: Pregnancy by randy_miranda is an amusing set of Limericks, well worth the read.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
Nil Caborundum illigitimi
Sestina slut
Annie submits
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Old 08-06-2018, 10:02 AM   #580
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Red face My poems

Not actually recommending them and always meant to post some to lit. This is more depression therapy than anything else but I started a blog of my poems at https://cassidymcgurk.wordpress.com/
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Old 08-10-2018, 04:13 PM   #581
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I try to at least peruse New Poems but usually don’t find any I’d recommend.
“The Girl I Wasn’t” by Carnal Flower I think is worth reading.

https://www.literotica.com/p/the-girl-i-wasnt
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Old 08-26-2018, 03:09 PM   #582
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In “No Small Seduction’” darkmaas gives the reader a well done erotic poem. There is a lot of embroidery here. I had to look up several terms. My impatience usually gets the better of it, and I stop reading. However, that wasn’t the case here:

https://www.literotica.com/p/no-small-seduction
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Old 09-02-2018, 05:32 PM   #583
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Appetites by darkmaas made me smile.
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Old 09-02-2018, 07:58 PM   #584
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Appetites by darkmaas made me smile.

Thank you for the recommendation, Piscator - lovely poem!
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Old 09-02-2018, 08:05 PM   #585
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In “No Small Seduction’” darkmaas gives the reader a well done erotic poem. There is a lot of embroidery here. I had to look up several terms. My impatience usually gets the better of it, and I stop reading. However, that wasn’t the case here:

https://www.literotica.com/p/no-small-seduction
I really enjoyed this one.
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Old 09-14-2018, 09:30 AM   #586
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Ellen More strikes again In Our Room at Pedregal
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Old 09-26-2018, 01:38 PM   #587
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this moment, soft and tender
is when the whip will fly
to spank her naked splendor
of ass cheeks lifted high------ this divine 4-line verse lifted Jenaus's New Poem " of edging , whips and cum..." into the BDSM Hall of Fame!!!!!
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Old 10-10-2018, 10:28 AM   #588
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Ink and Pen by susansnow

Every now and then I get it, I think
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Old 10-10-2018, 11:51 AM   #589
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Ink and Pen by susansnow

Every now and then I get it, I think
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seconded
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Old 10-21-2018, 01:46 PM   #590
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To the Heart - literally from BlackCaramelCreme
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Old 10-21-2018, 05:50 PM   #591
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To the Heart - literally from BlackCaramelCreme
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Old 10-27-2018, 05:13 PM   #592
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nice!

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Ink and Pen by susansnow

Every now and then I get it, I think
Yes, a very nice poem.

It does have some (I counted three) blemishes, I hope that they will get fixed. The second sentence ends, and the third starts, with:
...through her. Complicated truths...
Instead of "her" and "Complicated", there should be poetry. The same goes later on with word "permanence".
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Old 10-27-2018, 05:25 PM   #593
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A fresh breeze

This is what poem
but subtle __by susansnow
is on Literotica.

In particular, "Gypsy" is one of the words that go well with poetry.

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Old 10-27-2018, 05:34 PM   #594
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Turkey Dump by Piscator nice punch at the end
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Old 11-03-2018, 08:51 PM   #595
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