Dee's Naughty Descent Ch03

Added a new chapter to Dee's Naughty Descent. Readers keep writing me for a sequel. Dee is a real woman whom I know well. Let me know what you think!

http://www.literotica.com/s/dees-naughty-descent-ch-03

Chapter 1 - 2

http://www.literotica.com/s/dees-naughty-descent
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MrDeep said:

Added a new chapter to Dee's Naughty Descent. Readers keep writing me for a sequel. Dee is a real woman whom I know well. Let me know what you think!

http://www.literotica.com/s/dees-naughty-descent-ch-03

Chapter 1 - 2

http://www.literotica.com/s/dees-naughty-descent
http://www.literotica.com/s/dees-naughty-descent-ch-02

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You need an editor, some fine tuning, and to keep you in the same tense. You have a tendency to wander from past to present and back again. Also you need to watch yourself "starting" things. otherwise pretty hot, got me half hard. I prefer less yelling, "suck my cock, ho!", but I guess that's merely different strokes.