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Old 07-16-2018, 10:57 AM   #1
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Darkness, Demons and Inner Dialogues

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Just a few random, rather poor pieces. Am I looking for feedback? I am not quite sure.

I suppose if I am writing, might as well get better at it. I suppose feedbacks are welcome... Till they are not.

I just need a little nook, to nest and hide, and write.

Because sometimes, that is all that we have.
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Old 07-16-2018, 11:58 AM   #2
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The truth is

Look, people fall in love all the time
People fall out of love all the time
Given the shit ton of people in this world
Someone somewhere is getting their stupid heart broken.

It's all terribly commonplace.
There is nothing special about your love.
There is nothing special about your heartache.
No one gives a damn about your over-worked emotions.

This is the simple truth.
No one will miss you when you are gone.
He won't care if you died.
He didn't even give a fuck that you existed at all.
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Old 07-16-2018, 12:03 PM   #3
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Would you believe it?

That there was once a time when I used to do a half decent job with my writings...


Unlike the trash I spew out now.
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Old 07-17-2018, 04:19 AM   #4
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Look, people fall in love all the time
People fall out of love all the time
Given the shit ton of people in this world
Someone somewhere is getting their stupid heart broken.

It's all terribly commonplace.
There is nothing special about your love.
There is nothing special about your heartache.
No one gives a damn about your over-worked emotions.

This is the simple truth.
No one will miss you when you are gone.
He won't care if you died.
He didn't even give a fuck that you existed at all.
Probably true.
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Old 07-17-2018, 12:23 PM   #5
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Probably true.
I agree
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Old 07-17-2018, 02:44 PM   #6
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Traitor

My hand work
Furiously rubbing,
Eyes forced shut,
Trying to ignore
The screaming protests
Of my traitor brain.

The body reacts,
Senses build,
Breathing faster,
Nearly there,
Just a little longer,
Shut out my traitor brain.

Flash comes your memory,
My body brakes hard,
Falling short of the peak,
Like a missed step in the dark,
My body loses,
Once again to my traitor brain.
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Old 07-19-2018, 12:11 AM   #7
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*About 700 erased and edited lines later*

Just a few random, rather poor pieces. Am I looking for feedback? I am not quite sure.

I suppose if I am writing, might as well get better at it. I suppose feedbacks are welcome... Till they are not.

I just need a little nook, to nest and hide, and write.

Because sometimes, that is all that we have.
Hello and welcome, I hope you stay and write but most of all read. There are some wonderful poets here and I don't just mean those posting in New Poems (although there are plenty of our residents posting there also) but the majority on there just post and run they don't bother to come in here.
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Old 07-20-2018, 02:42 PM   #8
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Hello and welcome, I hope you stay and write but most of all read. There are some wonderful poets here and I don't just mean those posting in New Poems (although there are plenty of our residents posting there also) but the majority on there just post and run they don't bother to come in here.
Thank you.
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