astuffedshirt_perv
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Hello,
My latest story is a First Time at I'm-an-adult-now-ocean-city .
I'd like some thoughts on it, particularly in regards to dialog. One of my favorite essays here at lit is Whispersecret's how-to-make-characters-talk . I usually use that as guidance for my dialog.
However, I was so frustrated with the volunteer editor program that I paid $10 on fiverr to get it edited. That editor had a different take, which I ended up using for this story: " In modern fiction... It's "said" and "asked." Never have a character laugh, growl, or chuckle a word of dialogue."
and she directed me to this link: realistic-dialogue
What do you think of the dialog? Who should I go with? Whispersecret or the other way?
My latest story is a First Time at I'm-an-adult-now-ocean-city .
I'd like some thoughts on it, particularly in regards to dialog. One of my favorite essays here at lit is Whispersecret's how-to-make-characters-talk . I usually use that as guidance for my dialog.
However, I was so frustrated with the volunteer editor program that I paid $10 on fiverr to get it edited. That editor had a different take, which I ended up using for this story: " In modern fiction... It's "said" and "asked." Never have a character laugh, growl, or chuckle a word of dialogue."
and she directed me to this link: realistic-dialogue
What do you think of the dialog? Who should I go with? Whispersecret or the other way?