Old 01-06-2015, 02:00 PM   #326
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Old 01-06-2015, 08:14 PM   #327
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I coulda left it blank hindsight, ya know.
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Old 01-09-2015, 07:33 AM   #328
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One Kiss by tholepin is one of the best examples of light verse I've seen on Lit.
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Old 02-08-2015, 07:24 AM   #329
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Although the subject is disturbing, I thought "Thirteen" by Piscator was thought provoking.
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Old 02-08-2015, 08:54 PM   #330
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Great narration!

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Look, this Stardust is the very first submission under DaddysTastyTreat, and it's fun!
Great narration. I just have read this poem again. Very nice. Very nice composition--iteration. It's about everyday life, prosaic, while the poem creates transcendental mood. Thus, after all, this poem is in minor key, a bit sad.
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Old 02-16-2015, 03:02 AM   #331
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Both Dem's poems posted today are worth a dekko for the sarcastic , satiric look @ corporate greed in one & the sense of yearning hope in the other .....
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Old 02-21-2015, 03:55 PM   #332
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Both Dem's poems posted today are worth a dekko for the sarcastic , satiric look @ corporate greed in one & the sense of yearning hope in the other .....
I second. I didn't have time to leave comments but they are both very good ink!
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Old 02-21-2015, 04:01 PM   #333
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I second. I didn't have time to leave comments but they are both very good ink!
By Demure101? -- Neither is original, and both are banal (trivial--these two unfortunate features go hand in hand).

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Old 02-24-2015, 12:27 AM   #334
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I recommend a dekko @ Pel's On Free Markets if only for the controversuies it's managed to generate in the PFD threads !
Also Nice Miss Price for erotica .
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Old 02-24-2015, 12:36 AM   #335
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I recommend a dekko @ Pel's On Free Markets if only for the controversuies it's managed to generate in the PFD threads !
Also Nice Miss Price for erotica .


Ashesh, people may be too lazy. To steer a controversy well and efficiently, you need to learn how to make links (elegantly!).
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Old 02-24-2015, 05:51 PM   #336
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Poem
the Theory of ....Nothing ?!
by Ashesh9 is pleasant to read but a bit thin. The premise of gaining your personal freedom by letting go of your ego is of course very old, this is the very basic departure point of poetry--of old Chinese poetry, of haiku, etc. Perhaps this poem can be used as repeated refrain, and pelegrino may assist you, Ashesh, in writing stanzas around this refrain.

PS. Ashesh, look at these links! and make them like this yourself.
PPS. Can some natives check in detail on the given poem? If anything then it should be easy to fix.
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Old 02-24-2015, 07:25 PM   #337
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"Leafy And Green" by pelegrino

First of all, thank you pelerino for the note under the poem, it reads:

Leafy and green = Northern Europe
Sunny and Blue = Southern Europe
We have:
Leafy And Green
by pelegrino. It is a strong song and a good poem. It's better as a song than as a poem.

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First a detail: green-sin is not a rhyme in English. But it can pass for a foreign rhyme.
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The rhymes in this piece are good--not excellent and not blatant. Thus they are about perfect for a song, while not interesting for a poem. Also the story is connected well enough for a song but a bit less for a poem. Indeed, we have a strong song, and a good poem. The mentioned note is precious.

PS. In some poems, exceptionally, blatant rhymes can be very good (rarely though!).

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Old 02-25-2015, 10:21 AM   #338
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the Theory of ....Nothing ?!
by Ashesh9 is pleasant to read but a bit thin. The premise of gaining your personal freedom by letting go of your ego is of course very old, this is the very basic departure point of poetry--of old Chinese poetry, of haiku, etc. Perhaps this poem can be used as repeated refrain, and pelegrino may assist you, Ashesh, in writing stanzas around this refrain.

PS. Ashesh, look at these links! and make them like this yourself.
PPS. Can some natives check in detail on the given poem? If anything then it should be easy to fix.
Senna pl. note " neither a Thought nor a Thinker be ...... " ----if you ever tried to Clear your turbulent mind of thoughts for even 5 minutes you'd see it's a very difficult Science , art or skill
: call it as thou'st will !?!
this is the Greatest 'n most difficult of all Yogas ----the Jnyana Yoga or as Swami Vivekananda taught in 1893 in New York also known as Raj-Yog !!!
it's simpler to twist a human body into convoluted angles which is Hatha Yoga but to calm the Unquiet Seas of the Human Mind requires the discipline , courage & heart of a Christ , Moses , a Muhammad , Krishna or the Buddha !!!
this ain't a" bit thin" maaan : it's deep very deeeeep !!!!!!
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Old 02-27-2015, 02:30 PM   #339
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I recommend Okudzhava by Senna J ( still can't elegantly post 'em links Senna , humble apologies) about a Russian Poet : if you google his unpronounceable name you can find links to his Poetry on Google , Wikipedia etc. he was a popular Russian language poet who was & is still well loved in Russia , Poland & the Chech Republic . His father was arrested & shot dead by KGB on trumped up charges of being a Third Reich spy & even his mother was imprisoned in the infamous Gulag .
Reading his poetry i was astonished at his literary talent & am thankful to Senna for havin' brought him to Lit !
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Old 02-27-2015, 03:04 PM   #340
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I recommend Okudzhava by Senna J ( still can't elegantly post 'em links Senna , humble apologies) about a Russian Poet : if you google his unpronounceable name you can find links to his Poetry on Google , Wikipedia etc. he was a popular Russian language poet who was & is still well loved in Russia , Poland & the Chech Republic . His father was arrested & shot dead by KGB on trumped up charges of being a Third Reich spy & even his mother was imprisoned in the infamous Gulag .
Reading his poetry i was astonished at his literary talent & am thankful to Senna for havin' brought him to Lit !
I agree. This was nicely done.

After B.Okudzhava--a free variation
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Old 03-02-2015, 02:39 PM   #341
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Today in a row Senna , GM & Pel have posted in NP : it's like a banquet by Master Chefs comin' together for a Grande Finale dinner !!
Save me from...... By Senna hints about the Poet's flight 'cross the Iron Curtain .........
GM's Final Frontier is set in " Caledonia " 92 AD , where it rains throughout & the women are ugly !?!?
Pel in Cheap Fuck negotiates with a call girl but does not consummate the deal......because it is ( you guessed it !) a Cheap Fuck !!!
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Old 03-09-2015, 05:55 AM   #342
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just juxtaposin' the titles of some of today's / yesterday's Erotic category poems throws up interestin' combinashuns ' :-----
a Poem from my Dom
when Sally is wearin' her Strap on ....
I want my wife to fuck other men ....??!
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Old 03-10-2015, 11:02 AM   #343
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Interesting piece with a whole lot going on, please read comment be merry
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Old 03-11-2015, 06:03 AM   #344
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Syndra Lynne presents But I'm NO WHERE NEAR READY,

the sonics in this are special indeed a beautiful rhythm, a little heavy on adjectives but they all fit and help the flow of the write, the alliteration is well spaced so it trips off the tongue.
a colourful treasure-trove of imagery.
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Old 04-14-2015, 07:08 AM   #345
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https://www.literotica.com/p/snakebit By AMovaeblebeast

Read comment, it's an interesting and wild ride
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Old 04-17-2015, 02:52 AM   #346
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Read comment, it's an interesting and wild ride
Thanks for this. I...didn't know this thread existed. Huh. Very cool.
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Old 04-20-2015, 07:08 AM   #347
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Flight of the Intrpid Goddess by AMoveableBeast is as good as it gets in New Poems IMO:

https://www.literotica.com/p/flight-...trepid-goddess
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Old 04-29-2015, 02:32 PM   #348
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The understated eroticism and very delicate handling of desire in this write is a must read
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Old 05-04-2015, 09:25 AM   #349
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"love's sum" by SpringBreezes a nicely written and imaginative love poem:

https://www.literotica.com/p/loves-sum
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Old 05-06-2015, 06:26 PM   #350
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Nightmare in Sarvodaya Nagar

Ashesh9 gives us the rollercoaster ride we all know (those of us that remember our dreams, at least) from our nights of terror and unease in the world of make-believe behind our eyelids in a well-built, very organic feeling, and doom-laden atmospheric piece about a nightmare and the dread it harbors. If you have frequent problems with nightmares, this one will probably speak to you quite a bit. If you don't, it will probably still speak to you quite a bit. Give it a go, I think you'll find you like it.

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