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Old 02-25-2018, 05:58 PM   #251
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ohhhhhhhh - VERY arousing
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“Men are afraid that women will laugh at them and women are afraid that men will kill them.” — Margaret Atwood

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Old 02-25-2018, 05:59 PM   #252
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Old 02-25-2018, 06:00 PM   #253
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"The first time we spoke I told you that I,
May have been sent you as God's own reply,
To a prayer you had made him, though you never knew.
The want you were feeling, drew me to you.


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Old 02-27-2018, 06:31 PM   #254
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Gemini Lost

first verse - very good

"where Zues' son makes play.

I take it you mean Zeus
Thank you

Most of those older ones likely need much editing
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Old 03-11-2018, 11:25 AM   #255
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Found a couple of verses of a way back poem of yours, C, while doing a trip dwn memory lane

I'd rather be a vivid
puddle of wax
clear, finished
and ready for a new
form

sculpt me into curves
and hollows with secret
textures waiting
to be discovered

What can I say? it is quite beautiful - simple and lilting
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Old 04-22-2018, 10:29 PM   #256
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The Leaves Are Late

This year snow has been the featured terrain
on every front lawn far longer than green grass
I imagine the dandeloins are eager to unfurl from rest
and feed the bees those first precious sips of nectar

How can we save a planet when winter refuses
to let go? Does doing "our part" mean wearing
that well worn sweater another day? I can't find
the answers from history since this spring is unique

Cities south of here have experienced this weather,
this broken pattern of the record number of days
at sub-freezing temperatures and now are just barely
slipping from winter's icy grip to skid and spiral free

The soil lies dry and dusty beneath the ice as every drop
of snow melt and rain runs down into the rivers, swollen
from late spring accumulation and persistent cloud
that the fields reflect back the heat, staying dormant

Chill and brisk are words for March, not April. Instead
I think I'll be saying that about the wind in May. It's cold,
I'm cranky and my budget doesn't want to stretch to buy
another month of winter fuel at summer prices.

Why didn't we do something 48 years ago when activism
was fresh and demonstration was productive. How
did these intervening decades manage to pull the teeth
out of the EPA's and Clean Air Act's mouths?

What would Senator Gaylord Nelson say?
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Old 05-04-2018, 10:41 PM   #257
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You Could Have Done Much Better

There you were, a holo
of helplessness pleading
an aging hero to rise
into a role set aside
to watch over the male.

Ahh, the male, the man,
I'd have thought women
would have progressed
beyond the constraints
of the nonsense spouted
here, in a galaxy
far, far away from Alderan

You, Leia, were a senator;
a ruler of a World!
And yet you yield
to a "space pirate". Really!?

I mean what-the-hell, Princess?
Some free-booter smuggler
steals the heart of a leader
in a galactic rebellion
and you let him sweep
you away and out of authority.

He will never be a politician,
he will never understand
that you are more than a womb
for his children to incubate
within. Be careful, Leia,

they'll make you give
your crown to that blue-
glowing phallic symbol waving
twin of yours and then mute
your style with motherhood.

Ahhh, Princess Leia, meant
to be more yet content
in a timeless routine,
an important duty,
a relentless responsibility.
It becomes you but really,
you should have been the Queen.
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Old 05-07-2018, 03:07 AM   #258
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I seem to find your writing evocative. I find I want to write something after reading your poetry
I like the line to 'mute your style with motherhood', says alot. I suppose that motherhood would also bring wisdom???
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Old 05-07-2018, 09:49 PM   #259
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I seem to find your writing evocative. I find I want to write something after reading your poetry
I like the line to 'mute your style with motherhood', says alot. I suppose that motherhood would also bring wisdom???
I suspect wisdom comes with menopause. When we no longer need to be bothered with the whole impregnation thing then we can afford to be wise and say, "I told you so."

I wrote this poem just after the release of The Phantom Menace. I wasn't impressed with Princess Amidala and her wishy-washy neediness, and I think even though the next movies tried to say differently, the sexualization of Leia squished any hopes of a strong feminine ruler rocking the Empire. FFS, even though Leia had the same blood and genes as her brother, it seems that that whole hysteria of woman still kept the light sabre out of her hands. Thank goodness Rey has given me cause for hope that the powerful feminine is a paladin warrior when needed.

And that is a very nice compliment to my writing, I am glad it gives you pause and makes you itchy to put words out.
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Old 07-03-2018, 10:30 PM   #260
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Crows Of Winter

The far side of autumn is drawn in notes of gray.
Morning seems to close the drapes on the colours
of the dawn. Flannel sheets of sky, pulled up, over
the reluctant day, settle close against its skin.

Bright songs of springtime mating have drifed south
with flower's bloom, to leave the tired year dying.
Dressed in somber suits of muted light and winter's
clucking worry, now caws the black murder of crows.

The mourners gather round the hearth to recollect
that summer day when those shuttered eyes filled
with the colours of the sails that slid across
the lake, now stilled and reflecting darker sights.

Autumn passes slowly and sheds her bright cloak
as death throes shake her limbs. Each moan of wind
heard through the walls brings another chill
and she draws the flannel up beneath her chin.

She turns to slip away to a dreamland of summer,
far away from the crows of winter and the pain
brought with the cold of night and frost, that waits
over the lake beneath the colours of the sails.

October 17, 2006
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Old 07-03-2018, 10:32 PM   #261
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Inside This Shadow

Look beyond the the horizon
to a shadowed window. Fly
through and rest a while,
beside my pillowed head.

Dark bird, fly to me
and calm my beleaguered
heart. These dreams
do not refresh my soul.

Summer land and honeyed
scent of warm skin; sun
against my cheeks. Whisper
me no more, I cannot go.

What would we leave behind,
dark bird? That call, once
answered, would lead over
winter fields. What then?

What then if there is no
more to dream? Summer land
would fade to autumn
and darken to winter snow.

We've only dreams. Dark bird,
fly to me as I sleep and rest
with me inside this shadowed
room next to my pillowed head.

February 5, 2006
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Waiting For The Crows

I watch the clownish swagger as they approach;
only the foolish leave their dregs in soft bags
waiting for the crows.

They hop upon the green-black carcasses and pick
at one home's leavings as the winter frost rest on it,
waiting for the crows.

The tall streetlamp on the corner glimmers as a beacon
in the winter early morning, somehow, a perfect throne
waiting for the crows.

I find myself in mid-October, watching on those Tuesday mornings
as the garbage goes to the curb, in overstuffed soft bags
waiting for the crows.

November 18, 2005
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