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Old 02-22-2015, 06:57 AM   #102
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the crushing blow of a ringing slap
hollows out a cry as she begs
to be taken
slow and softly
enter in millimetres
another slap sour the sweet
interplay the sensation

delicate balance beam
sweetest juice rewards the patient
succours the hungry
ravenous to ravish
strawberry nipples bloom and peek through
the sheerest lace
trace the patterns
hands perch in place to taste the skin
beneath, a small tug
and it rips to the clipped cries
as I slide one deep thrust
inside

coarse fingers on fragile flesh
hardness cocooned
caressed in liquid fire
growl that throatiness
and groan out a whispered
fuck
into my teeth
taste my tongue
lose our thoughts
loose our beasts to meet the other
dizzy is a frame of mind
gasping is for the living
till la petite more
claims you
again and again
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Old 05-23-2015, 08:22 AM   #103
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Moan me a tone
on how we fit together
hard teeth sharp that bite deep
moan me a groan
whisper fuck
shuck off the shackles
of ordinary
grasp the air
hold onto breath and taste the damn wall
lash the ground and pound the desk
demand the slick slope
hope that the last gasp
rasps from swollen lips
hold tight and restrain the damn wall

stick me in places almost too tight
awash in the sight of empty air
moan me the tones of pleasure
groan against the damn wall
as it bulges fit to bust a gush of
God's water
fold the edges hold
tight
take me into those forbidden places
go for the release
flow over
hold tight
come fold like origami
depth and girth so pliable
so willing flesh
out this moment
break over the damn wall

crush me
in tone and moans that go on
and come again
like waves crash against a stormy shore
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Old 05-23-2015, 09:20 AM   #104
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Moan me a tone
on how we fit together
hard teeth sharp that bite deep
moan me a groan
whisper fuck
shuck off the shackles
of the ordinary
grasp the air
hold onto breath and taste the damn wall
lash the ground and pound the desk
demand the slick slope
hope that the last gasp
rasps from swollen lips
hold tight and restrain the damn wall

stick me in places almost too tight
awash in the sight of empty air
moan me the tones of pleasure
groan against the damn wall
as it bulges fit to bust a gush of
God's water
fold the edges hold
tight
take me into those forbidden places
go for the release
flow over
hold tight
come fold like origami
depth and girth so pliable
so willing flesh
out this moment
break over the damn wall

crush me
in tone and moans that go on
and come again
like waves crash against a stormy shore
amazing writing, tod. At first blush, I thought "well, he could have ended it after the first stanza, but then I read those killer lines "as it bulges fit to bust a gush of/God's water" and then my mind heard echoes of "o" in all the moans, groans, hold, hope, so, go, tone, swollen, and even almost and was reminded "ooh" is a sound of pleasure.
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Old 05-23-2015, 09:30 AM   #105
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Yes yes yes yesssssss....

You know, having heard your voice I can almost hear you recite this one, and I hope you will. I can hear that lovely accent of yours roll out the tones gm points out. I may have more to say later.




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Moan me a tone
on how we fit together
hard teeth sharp that bite deep
moan me a groan
whisper fuck
shuck off the shackles
of the ordinary
grasp the air
hold onto breath and taste the damn wall
lash the ground and pound the desk
demand the slick slope
hope that the last gasp
rasps from swollen lips
hold tight and restrain the damn wall

stick me in places almost too tight
awash in the sight of empty air
moan me the tones of pleasure
groan against the damn wall
as it bulges fit to bust a gush of
God's water
fold the edges hold
tight
take me into those forbidden places
go for the release
flow over
hold tight
come fold like origami
depth and girth so pliable
so willing flesh
out this moment
break over the damn wall

crush me
in tone and moans that go on
and come again
like waves crash against a stormy shore
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Old 05-26-2015, 11:15 AM   #106
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amazing writing, tod. At first blush, I thought "well, he could have ended it after the first stanza, but then I read those killer lines "as it bulges fit to bust a gush of/God's water" and then my mind heard echoes of "o" in all the moans, groans, hold, hope, so, go, tone, swollen, and even almost and was reminded "ooh" is a sound of pleasure.
Thank you GM, it's interesting when people see exactly what we were trying to accomplish in a write this one here I think will work better as spoken word, the phrases and words themselves are very predictable, simplistic but I think the sonics worked out the way I wanted them to.


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Yes yes yes yesssssss....

You know, having heard your voice I can almost hear you recite this one, and I hope you will. I can hear that lovely accent of yours roll out the tones gm points out. I may have more to say later.
How about you read it for me
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Thank you GM, it's interesting when people see exactly what we were trying to accomplish in a write this one here I think will work better as spoken word, the phrases and words themselves are very predictable, simplistic but I think the sonics worked out the way I wanted them to.
After reading this post, I spent a little time reading your poem aloud, and I agree that it works really well as a spoken word. I found it interesting to see where I found I wanted to emphasize words or play with the tempo while reading. I'd love to hear your reading of it sometime, to see how you read it vs how I found myself reading it.

I liked it before, but I have a different appreciation for it now.
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After reading this post, I spent a little time reading your poem aloud, and I agree that it works really well as a spoken word. I found it interesting to see where I found I wanted to emphasize words or play with the tempo while reading. I'd love to hear your reading of it sometime, to see how you read it vs how I found myself reading it.

I liked it before, but I have a different appreciation for it now.
Glad you found an oral appreciation for this piece......sorry if that sounded dirty
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Glad you found an oral appreciation for this piece......sorry if that sounded dirty
I bet if you read it, I'll have an aural appreciation for it, too.
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I bet if you read it, I'll have an aural appreciation for it, too.
So that's how you spell it........
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Old 05-28-2015, 10:43 PM   #111
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Moan me a tone
on how we fit together
hard teeth sharp that bite deep
moan me a groan
whisper fuck
shuck off the shackles
of ordinary
grasp the air
hold onto breath and taste the damn wall
lash the ground and pound the desk
demand the slick slope
hope that the last gasp
rasps from swollen lips
hold tight and restrain the damn wall

stick me in places almost too tight
awash in the sight of empty air
moan me the tones of pleasure
groan against the damn wall
as it bulges fit to bust a gush of
God's water
fold the edges hold
tight
take me into those forbidden places
go for the release
flow over
hold tight
come fold like origami
depth and girth so pliable
so willing flesh
out this moment
break over the damn wall

crush me
in tone and moans that go on
and come again
like waves crash against a stormy shore
I hadn't seen any takers on doing an audio of this one... pardon the slurring sibilant shuck off the shackles. It was a fun read.

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I hadn't seen any takers on doing an audio of this one... pardon the slurring sibilant shuck off the shackles. It was a fun read.

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Mmmm! A luscious liquid read, like sitting at the lip of the ocean and letting the tide roll over you, resisting the pull but only because you want to feel it again and again.
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I hadn't seen any takers on doing an audio of this one... pardon the slurring sibilant shuck off the shackles. It was a fun read.

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An enjoyable listen. Your reading of it is different in some ways than how I read it aloud, and it was fun to hear another version. I'm glad you posted this.
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Mmmm! A luscious liquid read, like sitting at the lip of the ocean and letting the tide roll over you, resisting the pull but only because you want to feel it again and again.
definitely agreed with trix and Calli!!

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An enjoyable listen. Your reading of it is different in some ways than how I read it aloud, and it was fun to hear another version. I'm glad you posted this.


Thank you champ that was definitely an inspired read, now I think I'm seriously going to have to re-work the interim read that I did. I'm glad you had fun

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I hadn't seen any takers on doing an audio of this one... pardon the slurring sibilant shuck off the shackles. It was a fun read.

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Old 07-02-2015, 08:55 PM   #115
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Simple thoughts trickle
through this simple mind
of food and work
fighting
then bam
there you are unclothed
writhing on a bed of satin laced
pillows and a come hither stare
that bares all in its naked demand

how it seems to strip back the layers
of ego and pretension
ripped back to raw
lust
and I must
take you

Feel that first thrust slowly
take hold as you
s
w
a
l
l
o
w

every damn agonising moment
I need to get to know you
your ticks and kinks
lets ride this to the edge
of my minds grasp of control
and fling ourselves entwined
into beast like growls
that groan from
moaning lips and swollen bits
all that heat
rises
before it bursts
and we gush
our overflow onto these sheets
and that stain
still
makes me hard
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every damn agonising moment
I need to get to know you
your ticks and kinks
lets ride this to the edge
of my minds grasp of control
and fling ourselves entwined
into beast like growls
that groan from
moaning lips and swollen bits
all that heat
rises
before it bursts
and we gush
our overflow onto these sheets
and that stain
still
makes me hard

Ahem... pardon me while I get a glass of ice water. And a towel. Hot damn.
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Old 08-04-2015, 06:02 AM   #118
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Old 08-04-2015, 09:21 AM   #119
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Bye, bye baby

One touch
is never enough
tongue must
follow fingers
delighting as
you unfold.

Flicking faster
firmer
tauntingly teasing
before fading to
imperceptible.

Pianissimo
reaching
for fortissimo
but
diminuendo
and
ritardando
intervene.

Each cycle
almost repeating
yet never
the same.

Arousal building
ebbing
waves lapping
at your breach.

Until
the seventh
wave.
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Old 08-04-2015, 09:57 AM   #120
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That is too good for the just porn thread piscator!
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That is too good for the just porn thread piscator!
Yeah, i enjoyed it's evolution. The quiet build into powerful waves.
But hell, tod, your's just before it was no slouch.
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I have to agree with tod. That poem is yummy, but too subtle for anything I'd call porn. I like it a lot.
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Old 08-09-2015, 01:47 PM   #123
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tod, Pensive and Lyri, thanks all for your kind comments, perhaps I'll try Everyday Erotics next and save the really raunchy for just porn
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Old 09-21-2015, 01:37 AM   #124
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Old 09-21-2015, 11:19 PM   #125
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I am an adventurous open minded kinky passionate man
that loves oral and all sorts of roll play.
—Line from an online personals ad.


OK, forget that "that" should be "who"—

I want to roll marbles with this man,
go bowling, toss tennis balls back and forth,
play a round of golf or bocce,
even roll down a hill like a log,
the way a ten-year-old would embrace
dizziness as verticality.

That we could tumble together,
over each other, over each other,
should cement us

like hardened epoxy
but, damn, if he's not already
bound to how he thinks of us
as girls. Well, orally, mister,

I would bite the tip off
of your presumption

and chew on your lack of understanding
of how grammar slips us all together
as mere green and intertwining leaves.
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