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Old 07-11-2018, 01:27 PM   #1
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Haiku reduction - breaking out of 17 syllable chains

Building on a link that Butters provided in the New/Old Haiku thread. I propose this thread where we take one of your 17 syllable Haiku and reduce it to it's essentials. With permission, you can also apply your reductionist tendencies to another's Haiku.

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Old 07-11-2018, 01:33 PM   #2
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wind raised ripples
track sideways across the lake
foundation of now
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wind ripples
skate across water
this is now
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wind ripples
skate across water
Zen now
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