MetaBob
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I have a paragraph with a word that has two options for tense, both of which I trip over. I think I've sorted out why but would like advice on potential resolution:
The alternative is to substitute the word "dreading" for "dreaded". I think the problem is my use of zeugma, which I usually love for its brevity, but in this case complexifies the tense of "dread". Cutting out intervening text I'm left with:
I was dreading it
vs.
I dreaded it
They both work in this sentence, but neither is entirely correct. I prefer the implication of "dreading" but am interested in other opinions.
She knelt beside me and I felt a fingertip trace its way slowly, gently caressing, four more fingertips resting nearby. It went on for a minute or two, was kinda soothing at a time I had a pretty good idea what would come next, and dreaded it.
The alternative is to substitute the word "dreading" for "dreaded". I think the problem is my use of zeugma, which I usually love for its brevity, but in this case complexifies the tense of "dread". Cutting out intervening text I'm left with:
I was dreading it
vs.
I dreaded it
They both work in this sentence, but neither is entirely correct. I prefer the implication of "dreading" but am interested in other opinions.