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Old 11-11-2013, 03:09 AM   #6876
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I suspect you know what will happen. Perhaps deserves even a thread. For further discussion?
Still experimenting, I had a small inkling but got to test the waters to failure before progress or some such business.

thankyou to oldbear, lesselovespeter ashesh9 for your comments, also
Thank you Greenmountaineer for the recommend on my poem, Stones, it was I think the obligatory where has my muse gone poem, written in 2 parts in the writing live thread, over my friggen Halloween poem.

the comment regarding the word change from, chaff to rubble was interesting as I had three words I was thinking of using'

rubble
chaff
scree

I chose chaff because of the ch sound,
ch-isel, ch-ip, ch-aff kind of trying for a chipping sound to play off the three words, to reveal the final lines.

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Old 11-11-2013, 12:27 PM   #6877
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Still experimenting, I had a small inkling but got to test the waters to failure before progress or some such business.

thankyou to oldbear, lesselovespeter ashesh9 for your comments, also
Thank you Greenmountaineer for the recommend on my poem, Stones, it was I think the obligatory where has my muse gone poem, written in 2 parts in the writing live thread, over my friggen Halloween poem.

the comment regarding the word change from, chaff to rubble was interesting as I had three words I was thinking of using'

rubble
chaff
scree

I chose chaff because of the ch sound,
ch-isel, ch-ip, ch-aff kind of trying for a chipping sound to play off the three words, to reveal the final lines.
kudos, this is poetic thought
10,000 ways to write 'em
 

Old 11-11-2013, 06:39 PM   #6878
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Still experimenting, I had a small inkling but got to test the waters to failure before progress or some such business.

thankyou to oldbear, lesselovespeter ashesh9 for your comments, also
Thank you Greenmountaineer for the recommend on my poem, Stones, it was I think the obligatory where has my muse gone poem, written in 2 parts in the writing live thread, over my friggen Halloween poem.

the comment regarding the word change from, chaff to rubble was interesting as I had three words I was thinking of using'

rubble
chaff
scree

I chose chaff because of the ch sound,
ch-isel, ch-ip, ch-aff kind of trying for a chipping sound to play off the three words, to reveal the final lines.
I liked the poem, tod, but "chaff" made me think of grain, not stone.
 

Old 11-12-2013, 09:32 AM   #6879
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I liked the poem, tod, but "chaff" made me think of grain, not stone.
aff at the end softens the ch sound
I didn't like the poem, I liked the thought. And commented, further.
 

Old 11-15-2013, 01:57 PM   #6880
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