BlueMuffin
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My first story that I have written with the intent for anyone to actually read it.
I would like some comments and criticisms on it so I can improve for the next chapter.
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-coward-and-the-wolf-ch-01
Just some info on what works well
What doesn't?
Does it have too much internal monologue?
Is the dialogue OK?
Etc.
Just some general feedback so I can improve my writing.
Thanks
I would like some comments and criticisms on it so I can improve for the next chapter.
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-coward-and-the-wolf-ch-01
Just some info on what works well
What doesn't?
Does it have too much internal monologue?
Is the dialogue OK?
Etc.
Just some general feedback so I can improve my writing.
Thanks