I submitted My first poem and I would appreciate any feedback. Thank you in advance.
https://www.literotica.com/p/tiger-1
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I submitted My first poem and I would appreciate any feedback. Thank you in advance.
https://www.literotica.com/p/tiger-1
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Too many "My" and "I", which is why I came up with alternatives for you to try.
Thank you UnderYourSpell. The reason I used the capitalization on some words within the body of My work, is because I am an old school DOM. Any possessive pronouns that pertain to Me, I capitalize. Old habits. Just wanted to explain. I am taking all the comments to heart and I do thank you.
well you don't need to worry about that. I won't be posting again. I wrote something My submissive and I enjoyed very much, and I wanted to see if other people liked it too. I asked for feedback hoping others may like it or dislike it. Not expecting people to either tell Me the style was wrong, rewriting it themselves or trying to put words in My mouth. Hopefully the three of you don't treat everyone like this that asks for feedback.
well you don't need to worry about that. I won't be posting again. I wrote something My submissive and I enjoyed very much, and I wanted to see if other people liked it too. I asked for feedback hoping others may like it or dislike it. Not expecting people to either tell Me the style was wrong, rewriting it themselves or trying to put words in My mouth. Hopefully the three of you don't treat everyone like this that asks for feedback.
I submitted My first poem and I would appreciate any feedback. Thank you in advance.
https://www.literotica.com/p/tiger-1
I submitted My first poem and I would appreciate any feedback. Thank you in advance.
https://www.literotica.com/p/tiger-1
Hopefully the three of you don't treat everyone like this that asks for feedback.
well you don't need to worry about that. I won't be posting again. I wrote something My submissive and I enjoyed very much, and I wanted to see if other people liked it too. I asked for feedback hoping others may like it or dislike it. Not expecting people to either tell Me the style was wrong, rewriting it themselves or trying to put words in My mouth. Hopefully the three of you don't treat everyone like this that asks for feedback.
From the on-line Merriam-Webster:
Definition of feedback
1
: the return to the input of a part of the output of a machine, system, or process (as for producing changes in an electronic circuit that improve performance or in an automatic control device that provide self-corrective action)
2
a : the partial reversion of the effects of a process to its source or to a preceding stage
b : the transmission of evaluative or corrective information about an action, event, or process to the original or controlling source; also : the information so transmitted
3
: a rumbling, whining, or whistling sound resulting from an amplified or broadcast signal (as music or speech) that has been returned as input and retransmitted
I've now participated, to one extent or another, in four poetry sites, one of them run by a poetry magazine. I return here to the Poetry Feedback & Discussion forum time and time again BECAUSE of the high quality feedback I received when I first joined, and which has gotten better and better. People don't pull punches here. They give you what you ask for.
I don't always make the suggested changes, but I always listen because, for whatever reason, the folks here happen to have great ears and feel for poetry. And when they comment, they do it respectfully.
Oh, and PS I can't resist - dude, what kind of Dom are you if your feelings are hurt by a little honest criticism?