NaokoSmith
Honourable Slut
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Curl, Lien, thanks for this!
Lien, I think you're right with the graphic imagery, I can go overboard with similes so I should watch that. The writing is clunky, partly because I was scrambling to get this story done having not really intended to enter the first FAWC, so I didn't get the time to polish it up or get it edited. On the other hand, sometimes the clunkiness worked for me as it may have conveyed the amateur porn site cruising old bufton better.
I was keen at the time to write something that was a realistic portrayal of old age yet still romantic/sexy. I'm not quite there yet, but I am close enough to know that there will be a time when my ex-rugby playing limbs are not going at the same speed as my imagination! I was spending time with some (even) older relatives, whom I could tell had secret desires. (I had seen Google searches and text messages which were not intended for my eyes.) I kinda felt, well why wouldn't they and wanted to write something that didn't shy away from the generally perceived unsexiness of old bodies, while celebrating the older dirtier imagination .
I did try to create some sympathy for poor Joe by making him more of a moral presence on the websites than an outright dirty old man, and showing how hard it was for him to have his sexuality recognised. I wanted to show how we infantilise older people and are annoyed/amused if they're interested in sex. When does the iron gate of chastity fall? At 45? 50? 63? (To reference the famous Beatles song.)
Aww, curl, now I know how people feel when they read about their stories on my blog! It's so great when someone 'gets it', and also has a suggestion about how I could improve my writing. Please please keep reviewing! I personally don't intend to wait for people to come and ask me to review. When I get a moment, I shall post some more reviews of stories I've been reading on here which had something about the writing I liked and wanted to say more about than would easily fit into a comments box. And let me know if you would like to do a guest spot on my blog!
Lien, I think you're right with the graphic imagery, I can go overboard with similes so I should watch that. The writing is clunky, partly because I was scrambling to get this story done having not really intended to enter the first FAWC, so I didn't get the time to polish it up or get it edited. On the other hand, sometimes the clunkiness worked for me as it may have conveyed the amateur porn site cruising old bufton better.
I was keen at the time to write something that was a realistic portrayal of old age yet still romantic/sexy. I'm not quite there yet, but I am close enough to know that there will be a time when my ex-rugby playing limbs are not going at the same speed as my imagination! I was spending time with some (even) older relatives, whom I could tell had secret desires. (I had seen Google searches and text messages which were not intended for my eyes.) I kinda felt, well why wouldn't they and wanted to write something that didn't shy away from the generally perceived unsexiness of old bodies, while celebrating the older dirtier imagination .
I did try to create some sympathy for poor Joe by making him more of a moral presence on the websites than an outright dirty old man, and showing how hard it was for him to have his sexuality recognised. I wanted to show how we infantilise older people and are annoyed/amused if they're interested in sex. When does the iron gate of chastity fall? At 45? 50? 63? (To reference the famous Beatles song.)
Aww, curl, now I know how people feel when they read about their stories on my blog! It's so great when someone 'gets it', and also has a suggestion about how I could improve my writing. Please please keep reviewing! I personally don't intend to wait for people to come and ask me to review. When I get a moment, I shall post some more reviews of stories I've been reading on here which had something about the writing I liked and wanted to say more about than would easily fit into a comments box. And let me know if you would like to do a guest spot on my blog!