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Old 08-23-2017, 01:02 PM   #3351
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Talking Sex slaves enormous problem part 3.

Part 3 of my series is up. Its heavy on the bsdm. Would love some feedback.

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Old 08-24-2017, 11:49 PM   #3352
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Xanaphia,

"Getting to third base with a minor" is not allowed on Lit. It looks like you will have a second story removed soon.
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Old 08-25-2017, 04:19 AM   #3353
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I have written a sci-fi erotic story that needs a proof read!! Would you do it?
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Old 08-25-2017, 05:38 AM   #3354
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I have written a sci-fi erotic story that needs a proof read!! Would you do it?
It depends on the genre. Please PM me with the details.
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Old 08-26-2017, 06:47 PM   #3355
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Smile Looking for feedback

Hello good people. I have just had published my first story

https://www.literotica.com/s/a-tale-...switches-ch-01

I would love for any feed back on ways I can improve (this is my first attempt at erotica)

there are more chapters to come where things get hotter and darker I hope to improve as I go so any thoughts / comments would help
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Old 08-29-2017, 02:58 PM   #3356
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Xanaphia,

"Getting to third base with a minor" is not allowed on Lit. It looks like you will have a second story removed soon.
That scene hasn't even been submitted, which is why I was asking in the first place. But thanks for reporting an unrelated piece and cementing the unwelcoming atmosphere here. Which is too bad because plenty of other members were very helpful and supportive in their comments.
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Old 08-29-2017, 03:13 PM   #3357
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That scene hasn't even been submitted, which is why I was asking in the first place. But thanks for reporting an unrelated piece and cementing the unwelcoming atmosphere here. Which is too bad because plenty of other members were very helpful and supportive in their comments.
I didn't report anything. I saw a post where you said a rape story was reported and was replying to your post here. I didn't know the under-aged content story wasn't submitted.
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Old 09-20-2017, 02:33 AM   #3358
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If you like bratty subs getting spanked with metal rulers and dialogue about what a slave should be in the style of L. Antoniou, you'll probably like my rip-off of the Marketplace - The Brat. https://www.literotica.com/s/the-brat-5
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Old 09-20-2017, 08:17 AM   #3359
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Pleasure Knight

Young Knight comes to the Mansion of a powerful sorceress. Does he:
A) Run away
B) Kill her
C) Let her capture him and plunge him into a world of lies, treachery, and intrigue.
D) C, but with sex

If you answered D, check out my first story called Pleasure Knight: https://www.literotica.com/s/pleasure-knight

If you answered C), check it out but ignore the naughty bits.

If you answered B), you might be disappointed.

If you answered A),
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Old 10-10-2017, 02:40 PM   #3360
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Road to the Sun Chapter 7

Chapter 7https://www.literotica.com/s/road-to-the-sun-ch-07

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Old 10-13-2017, 12:31 PM   #3361
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https://www.literotica.com/s/beckys-...rprise-request

I'd appreciate more votes and feedback if anyone is looking for a story to read today. This is in the first time genre and is an mfm scenario. If something rubs you the wrong way, let me know. It was my favorite one to write, but it is polling lower than my others. So feedback will benefit me greatly.
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