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Old 02-02-2019, 03:18 PM   #101
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...That seems a one-scene formula. Everything happens in one place.
Don't confuse "scene" with "setting". You can have multiple scenes take place without ever changing the setting.
Okay, I should have said: Everything happens continuously in one place. The scene starts when the door closes. Events in the room occur without interruption or time tricks like flash-backs or -forwards or blackouts -- only a steady temporal flow. The scene ends when the door opens.

That's an outline sketch. Sure, the door could open and close several times in the scene, with players moving in and out, but the viewpoint remains within the room, unbroken.

Wikipedia supports me: In filmmaking and video production, a scene is generally thought of as the action in a single location and continuous time. Continuity makes the scene.
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Old 02-02-2019, 04:03 PM   #102
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Okay, I should have said: Everything happens continuously in one place...
Yeah, ok. I don't really have a formal definition of a "scene", but if I did this would be pretty close. I never said it couldn't be done or has never been done. I'm sure it can and has. It just seems to me to be one of those things that sounds easy at first, but then turns out to be kind of tricky once you try to do it.
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Old 02-02-2019, 09:17 PM   #103
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Yeah, ok. I don't really have a formal definition of a "scene", but if I did this would be pretty close. I never said it couldn't be done or has never been done. I'm sure it can and has. It just seems to me to be one of those things that sounds easy at first, but then turns out to be kind of tricky once you try to do it.
Turning a seamless scene into an entire story that follows a classic arc doesn't seem too tricky. It's a chamber drama. And for simple strokers, no problem -- a "zipless fuck" narrative will do. To make it interesting, ironically end with an O.Henry twist. That's only slightly tricky, essentially a dirty joke.
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Turning a seamless scene into an entire story that follows a classic arc doesn't seem too tricky. It's a chamber drama. And for simple strokers, no problem -- a "zipless fuck" narrative will do. To make it interesting, ironically end with an O.Henry twist. That's only slightly tricky, essentially a dirty joke.
I imagine that something like 80% of one-scene erotica stories would be in bed. Keeping the repertoire fresh could be an issue.
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Probably, but that is so cliché.
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Old 02-02-2019, 10:06 PM   #106
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Probably, but that is so cliché.
Clichés do abound here.
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Clichés do abound here.
And improbable anatomies and behaviors. Just what audiences demand.
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Old 02-02-2019, 10:59 PM   #108
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Probably, but that is so cliché.
Eh, if it works, it works. I've won three contests on here, all of them with stories where the sex happens in bed.
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Eh, if it works, it works. I've won three contests on here, all of them with stories where the sex happens in bed.
I don't doubt that a bit. We could have another discussion on whether or not a lot readers here like same old/same old. The stories I reviewed for submitting tomorrow have them doing it in bed but also on a beach towel, on the backseat of a Mercedes sedan, on a dining room table, hanging from a ceiling, on the roof of a yacht cabin, on the floor, over the toilet, on an office desk, against a high-rise building glass wall out over a street . . .

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I don't doubt that a bit. We could have another discussion on whether or not a lot readers here like same old/same old. The stories I reviewed for submitting tomorrow has them doing it in bed but also on a beach towel, on the backseat of a Mercedes sedan, on a dining room table, hanging from a ceiling, on the roof of a yacht cabin, on the floor, over the toilet, on an office desk against a high-rise building glass wall out over a street . . .
KeithD going all Green Eggs and Ham over here.

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Would you fuck them with a mouse?
I haven't put that in a story, but I could see doing it with a computer mouse.
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I haven't put that in a story, but I could see doing it with a computer mouse.
Cable or wireless?
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Cable or wireless?
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Cable or wireless?
One of my fave XMas gifts (from a savvy in-law) was an silver-plated wired mouse with my name inscribed. Much easier for erotic play than a trackball would be, but maybe not as intrusive as a light pen.

Would you fuck him with a light pen?
Would you do it again and again?
Would you force him with a gerbil?
Even if your tongue went purple?
Would your orifices open wide
If offered a hyperbolic ride?
Do your juices freely flow
When you answer, "I don't know?"

Continue for 750 words. Maybe post under an alt, for safety.
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Currently my two entries are rated as 2.57 and 3.30.
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I’m glad (sorry lol) it isn’t just me who got trolled, I have a 3.08.
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I’m glad (sorry lol) it isn’t just me who got trolled, I have a 3.08.
My worst start for a story too. And no comments yet that might give a clue as to why.
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3.40 myself. I don’t think this will be a high scoring affair.
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3.40 myself. I don’t think this will be a high scoring affair.
And they just got swept. I went from 10 votes to 6 and my score shot up to something closer to typical. I guess some troll out there really loves their long reads and wants to discourage this sort of thing.
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Possibility: Perhaps most LIT readers don't care for ultra-short author exercises.
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And they just got swept. I went from 10 votes to 6 and my score shot up to something closer to typical. I guess some troll out there really loves their long reads and wants to discourage this sort of thing.
My first vote was a 1. It looks like it was the same with a lot of other folks.
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And a Harddaysnight said in the comments that "I fear that Chloe may believe that Clique and Schmeek rhyme.".....

And he's right. I did. Oooohhhh. I thought that Clique (cleek) and schmeek did rhyme. So I read your comments and Webster says "klik". My baaaaad. I always thought is was kleek and that's how I've always said it.

Love all the stories and yes, I think really short stories get rated low - there's no time to achieve complete reader satisfaction...
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Mine's doing okay, despite two very stupid errors on my part 1) A 'dam' bursts open...not a 'damn'. 2) nipples get 'taut' not 'taught' Two homophones very appropriately brought to my attention in a very kind way. Quite embarrassing considering it's only 750 words

I read several last night late when they came out. Really interesting to see how different folks approached this. Ogg, I thought the lesbian spiders was one of the better ones I read. I've tried a couple of attempts at humor and they didn't go over as well as I thought they would

Except for the two boo-boos, I'm pleased with mine. It looks like I took a little more of a poetic/mystical approach. The ones I read were written more in a "story" style, and I was amazed out how complete some of them were...almost like there were more than 750 words in some of them.

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My worst start for a story too. And no comments yet that might give a clue as to why.

Same here, although it's now looking better after the (apparent) sweep. Only one comment, but it was a positive one.
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Same here, although it's now looking better after the (apparent) sweep. Only one comment, but it was a positive one.
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