Dicknstreet
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Hello, I am hoping to convey a young man's response to his first blow job, which he receives from an older (but not 'old'), more experienced woman whom he considers to be his "sexual mentor."
Is it over the top?
I have a tendency sometimes to use run-on sentences and take liberties with commas "for effect," so I know it's there - an opinion or two on how effective it is (if at all) would be appreciated.
This part is not particularly arousing, but it's a short excerpt from a long story with plenty of action, so I think that should be okay.
Any & all comments welcome.
Thanks,
Dick
Excerpt:
In my mind, I had made Denise into some kind of mythical sex goddess, and believed that she was the true path to sexual enlightenment. My first blow job was long and slow and luxurious, and made me realize that I was wrong; there was nothing mythical about her.
She spent the first 10 minutes (at least) with her lips wrapped around the head of my cock, that being the only contact between our bodies. My universe was compressed into an area about the size of a shot glass – for those few minutes, while she was licking and nibbling the tip, sucking down pre-cum as fast as I could produce it, nothing else existed. And so it went, as she moved on to the next step, and the next, each more intense than the last, but never frantic, never a sense of urgency, seemingly effortless on her part and no effort at all required of me. I lost track of time; I only knew that it was mid-afternoon when she started, and the sun was on the horizon when I experienced a climax that went on forever. Literally forever – it is a core belief of my religion that in some universe somewhere, I’m still cumming into Denise’s mouth.
Later, when I was asked to describe my first ever blow job, I could only look off into the distance, shake my head in wonder, and mutter, “The things she did with her mouth…”
Is it over the top?
I have a tendency sometimes to use run-on sentences and take liberties with commas "for effect," so I know it's there - an opinion or two on how effective it is (if at all) would be appreciated.
This part is not particularly arousing, but it's a short excerpt from a long story with plenty of action, so I think that should be okay.
Any & all comments welcome.
Thanks,
Dick
Excerpt:
In my mind, I had made Denise into some kind of mythical sex goddess, and believed that she was the true path to sexual enlightenment. My first blow job was long and slow and luxurious, and made me realize that I was wrong; there was nothing mythical about her.
She spent the first 10 minutes (at least) with her lips wrapped around the head of my cock, that being the only contact between our bodies. My universe was compressed into an area about the size of a shot glass – for those few minutes, while she was licking and nibbling the tip, sucking down pre-cum as fast as I could produce it, nothing else existed. And so it went, as she moved on to the next step, and the next, each more intense than the last, but never frantic, never a sense of urgency, seemingly effortless on her part and no effort at all required of me. I lost track of time; I only knew that it was mid-afternoon when she started, and the sun was on the horizon when I experienced a climax that went on forever. Literally forever – it is a core belief of my religion that in some universe somewhere, I’m still cumming into Denise’s mouth.
Later, when I was asked to describe my first ever blow job, I could only look off into the distance, shake my head in wonder, and mutter, “The things she did with her mouth…”