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Old 02-14-2018, 12:19 PM   #26
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I'll play.

Could you let me have your thoughts about this one?

CAVEAT - the ending is a bit of a gut-punch. Some readers were unhappy about that. But I wrote what happened...

It might not meet the 'kink'elements you mentioned in the original post, but it contains some (I think) pretty intense swinger scenes.


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Old 02-15-2018, 06:34 PM   #27
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Wouldn't mind getting some critique on my stories.

4 pages long, split in two parts: https://www.literotica.com/s/her-fir...s-costly-ch-01

2 pages: https://www.literotica.com/s/my-newest-coworker

1 page: https://www.literotica.com/s/the-couples-maid

You don't have to read all of them if you don't want to, of course.
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