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Old 05-27-2014, 07:05 AM   #3001
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Happy Birthday is the first story in what might become a series that I'm playing around with, about a kinky couple exploring whatever kink gets their attention. For this one, Emily finds blackmail to be a surprisingly erotic birthday present.

Been a while since writing a 1st person perspective, and even longer since the last time I wrote a short story-length tale, so input would be greatly appreciated.
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Old 05-28-2014, 09:55 PM   #3002
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To Love and Obey

My first multi-chapter story:



Category: NonConsent/Reluctance
My Literotica Stories (Read, Enjoy & Remember to Vote):

http://www.literotica.com/s/to-love-and-obey-ch-05 NEW - Robert and Cassie: Happily ever after?

http://www.literotica.com/s/to-love-and-obey-ch-04 - Robert deals with Cassie's infidelity & pregnancy.

http://www.literotica.com/s/to-love-and-obey-ch-03 - Robert's jealousies and insecurities erupt.

http://www.literotica.com/s/to-love-and-obey-ch-02 - Young Cassie deals with Robert's obsession and lust

http://www.literotica.com/s/to-love-and-obey ch 01 - Marriage to a sexually and emotionally jaded older man.

http://www.literotica.com/s/like-a-good-neighbor-5 - Young Woman Older Man Enjoy a Summer hook-Up

http://www.literotica.com/s/daddylover - Father/Daughter Incest Results in Pregnancy

http://www.literotica.com/s/dr-dorhring-1 - Older Man With Obsession, Drugs Unsuspecting Girl

http://www.literotica.com/s/jeremiah-wolf-progenitor - Stalked, Sexually Assaulted and Impregnated by a Werewolf
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Old 06-02-2014, 05:15 PM   #3003
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my first story... A simple, seemingly cliche "peeping Tom" scenario with a little extra twist... Or... Tryst. (sig)
Check out my NEW erotica: With A Tryst!

*Thanks for reading! 13,000 horny readers and counting!*
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Old 06-03-2014, 11:01 PM   #3004
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new story

link: http://www.literotica.com/s/self-fulfilling-fantasy

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Old 06-07-2014, 03:11 AM   #3005
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1. A non-human romance in two parts:

Love Conquers All- Part I

Love Conquers All- Part II


2. A non-consensual sex story: Minotaur

Despite what the name sounds like it does not involve non-humans.
Didja know there are stories on this site?
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Old 06-10-2014, 07:17 AM   #3006
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Part two of my little memoir: http://www.literotica.com/s/how-i-be...n-escort-pt-02
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Old 06-10-2014, 12:13 PM   #3007
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New Writer on Literotica

Having a blast writing my story. It's multi-part story about a Annie, Abel and Jack. Annie has a thing for a younger man. Jack wants Annie for business purposes and willing to do anything to get to her. And Abel, well, he'd like his life not to be so screwed up.

Personal Training, Ch. 1

Personal Training, Ch. 2

Personal Training, Ch. 3

Personal Training, Ch. 4

Personal Training, Ch. 5

Chapter 6 should be out tomorrow.

Any constructive critique welcome, as this is my first erotic story, (but not my first writing effort.)
New to Literotica. My first series--Personal Training--starts here: http://www.literotica.com/s/personal-training-ch-01

Atticus to Owen: "There is a time for fecking and a time for fucking, Owen," he said, "and a wise Irishman knows which is which."

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Old 06-11-2014, 10:47 AM   #3008
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First Story

Just had my first story accepted, and would love to hear comments or criticisms. Enjoy!


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Old 06-12-2014, 05:14 PM   #3009
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new incest story

I had fun with it!

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Old 06-16-2014, 01:38 PM   #3010
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I've recently redone 'A Trip To Lexaughtor'. I might go to second chapter and beyond. It's about a trio of guys who go on vacation to a planet populated by brightly colored aliens whose culture revolves around sex.

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Old 06-17-2014, 11:53 AM   #3011
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Cool Fawc 5


FAWC stands for Friendly Anonymous Writing Challenge, a collaboration between Lit authors. All authors are kept anonymous for the duration of the challenge and posted to Literotica under this name. All stories are written according to a certain set of parameters.

FAWC 5 had all the stories begin with the same line:

Upon the table lay three items: a handkerchief, a book, and a knife.

Where the stories went after that was up to the individual authors.

Check them out. There's a lot of variety in this exercise.
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Old 06-23-2014, 08:05 PM   #3012
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Hello all. My latest story is up as Minx Episode 4: The Sphere, Mesozoic Zone. http://www.literotica.com/s/minx-ep-...-mesozoic-zine.
While Minx finds herself friendless in the dangerous hollow world, Dragon follows her trail. Having just survived journeying across a land populated with creatures from the Cenozoic (Age of Mammals), our heroes find themselves headed for a land filled with monsters from the Age of Dinosaurs. I hope you enjoy the next instalment of this space opera adventure.
A list of my stories can be found here.
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Old 06-24-2014, 03:46 AM   #3013
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Soccer Mom and a Bully

It's my first story, chapter one is here http://www.literotica.com/s/soccer-mom-and-a-bully-1

It's about a mother who has sex with her sons bully, the fetish is called netorare if you don't know what that is google it. it's like cuckolding but worse.
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Old 06-26-2014, 12:28 AM   #3014
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Looking for some feedback (duh)

This is series I've written based around what I think would kind of be my ideal relationship, and my ideal girl. But anyway, the title kind of speaks for itself so please rate and comment, I'm definitely open to feedback!




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Old 06-28-2014, 07:13 PM   #3015
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New story - mom/son

New story. About a mom emerging from a coma. Memory loss, personality changes ensue.

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Old 07-01-2014, 12:55 PM   #3016
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First (and probably only) attempt:

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Old 07-04-2014, 09:54 AM   #3017
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My latest:


A quick and dirty dark fantasy tale about the quest for justice, demons and betrayal. For some reason, it's not doing too hot, but I guess that's to be expected, given the subject matter.
My stuff on Lit

The Big Catch
Written for the first Literotica Tag Team Contest by Zeb_Carter and me.

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Old 07-04-2014, 01:27 PM   #3018
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Posting now, a seven part Gay Male novella by sr71plt, The Greek Pimp (originally published as Apyko: The Greek Pimp under the pen name of habu) on the life of a Greek male-sex pimp:




Cosmo Eracules, as an eighteen-year-old orphaned refugee of the 1973 invasion of Cyprus by Turkey, is forced to take up male prostitution in Athens to survive. He is acquired by a wealthy patron who keeps him secret from his family and world and who dies while having sex with Cosmo on a yacht he has put in Cosmoís name. Fearing arrest for his patronís death, Cosmo and the crewman flee across the Mediterranean on the yacht, Cosmoís only possession, which he will rename the Apykos, and use as his home and later as his base of operations.

In Beirut he barely avoids being taken by a white slaver for sale to Arab men in the Middle East.

Rather than shrinking from the concept of young male prostitutes being taken by white slavers to sell to wealthy men, though, Cosmo embraces it. He himself becomes a pimp of young men in bad straits willing to sell their bodies to recover their fortunes. Young men who Cosmo then seduces, debauches, and sells to rich men. He mines the high-stakes casinos from Macau to Monte Carlo to Morocco to Las Vegas over nearly forty years. In the latter years he is moving just a step or two ahead of law enforcement.

Will he manage to retire and get out of the business or will the sordid past he has drifted into catch up with him?


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Old 07-11-2014, 07:13 AM   #3019
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First story......The Run.....be gentle!!!


Hi. First time writer and first time poster.

Please check out my first effort.....its not perfect, I probably should have spent more time on it, BUT I loved doing it and would really value any feedback you'd care to give.

Its fairly short and straightforward.....girl goes for jog...girl seeks shelter from storm....girl seizes opportunity for voyeurism.


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Old 07-15-2014, 07:29 AM   #3020
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For the foot fetishists out there, you may want to check out my new story, The Footjob


I had a lot of fun writing this one
"Death is not the biggest fear we have; our biggest fear is taking the risk to be alive...the risk to be alive and express what we really are" - Don Miguel Angel Ruiz

My published stories:
Perversions in the Penthouse (BDSM)

Sex, Thighs and Videotape (Exhibitionist & Voyeur)

The Footjob (Fetish)

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Old 07-18-2014, 11:15 AM   #3021
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New Story: Nightclub


Nightclub: A story of first time submission to a stranger.
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Old 07-19-2014, 03:15 AM   #3022
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Smile The Gallery -- New Story :)


Second story! God, this is quite addictive

Feedback welcome.

Thank you!
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Old 07-21-2014, 11:04 PM   #3023
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Originally Posted by RetchingHearts View Post
Here's my first ever Literotica story:

Waiting Patiently

This is a true story about me and my best friend. We are still going strong, too! I would appreciate any feedback anyone has to offer - both good and bad! Thank you!!
Thank you for sharing a well written "report on your experience". I enjoyed the read.
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Old 07-24-2014, 08:53 PM   #3024
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Originally Posted by lizzystein View Post

Nightclub: A story of first time submission to a stranger.
Wow. I love it. Fuck yes.

This will be read multiple times.
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Old Today, 11:04 AM   #3025
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Well here is my latest offering. It's in Loving Wives but no one gets burned


see what you think.
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