JasonClearwater
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Hi folks,
I have a new story up in Group this time (vs GM where I usually post).
https://www.literotica.com/s/valentines-for-adam.
It was going to be a Valentine's Day comp entry, but I struggled to finish it to where I was happy with it, and missed the deadline.
It contains mm and mf, and I'd be keen to get feedback from women on how I've written Corinne. I wanted to write a woman who was in control, without fetishising that control and turning it into a cuck story or a femdom story. Let me know how I did.
The basic outline of the story is that Jesse (bisexual man) is picked up by a woman (Corinne) at a concert, and he takes her back to what he thinks is an empty apartment belonging to Adam, an older man he's friends with, and who he's slept with before (character borrowed from electricblue66). From there, Corinne decides to seduce Adam, and Jesse joins in. And, as it turns out, Corinne rather likes watching Jesse and Adam together.
There's a lot of 'intro' that might be a touch boring, as I warmed myself into writing the characters. It's four pages, and the sex starts half-way down on page two, so I wouldn't call it stroke. But for the reader who has time on his or her hands, any feedback appreciated.
I have a new story up in Group this time (vs GM where I usually post).
https://www.literotica.com/s/valentines-for-adam.
It was going to be a Valentine's Day comp entry, but I struggled to finish it to where I was happy with it, and missed the deadline.
It contains mm and mf, and I'd be keen to get feedback from women on how I've written Corinne. I wanted to write a woman who was in control, without fetishising that control and turning it into a cuck story or a femdom story. Let me know how I did.
The basic outline of the story is that Jesse (bisexual man) is picked up by a woman (Corinne) at a concert, and he takes her back to what he thinks is an empty apartment belonging to Adam, an older man he's friends with, and who he's slept with before (character borrowed from electricblue66). From there, Corinne decides to seduce Adam, and Jesse joins in. And, as it turns out, Corinne rather likes watching Jesse and Adam together.
There's a lot of 'intro' that might be a touch boring, as I warmed myself into writing the characters. It's four pages, and the sex starts half-way down on page two, so I wouldn't call it stroke. But for the reader who has time on his or her hands, any feedback appreciated.