Looking for feedback. 800 words, not hardcore erotica or stroke material; probably falls under the "Erotic Couplings/Loving Wives" category. Previous writing style has been described as soulless and clinical; writing sample here
This new short story is focused on an straight couple's extra marital affair, from start and end. Mostly from the POV of the male character.
PM if interested, will provide Google Doc URL with comments permissions.
Thanks, ahead of time, for anyone willing to support.