lovecraft68
Bad Doggie
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Marcus Vitelli was a lot of things; some good, many bad, but the one thing he would never be was his father.
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I'm actually wondering if I should split this one up because it seems long. Just not sure where to split it.
He smells different. Clean. I’m not sure if I like it. I’m so used to all of our own natural scents. It’s not like we can just jump in the shower or take a bath whenever the mood hits, or the need arises, and yeah we probably could clean ourselves more often than we do, which is maybe once a week now that it’s gotten colder out, but I think I’ve gotten so used to our own natural scents that Eddie smelling like soap is almost distasteful to my nose.
Quoted from the source of great wisdom...the WEB
In informal writing, an ellipsis can be used to represent a trailing off of thought.
If only she had . . . Oh, it doesn’t matter now.
An ellipsis can also indicate hesitation, though in this case the punctuation is more accurately described as suspension points.
I wasn’t really . . . well, what I mean . . . see, the thing is . . . I didn’t mean it.
Like the exclamation point, the ellipsis is at risk of overuse.
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This may be the wrong thread to discuss this, but; I tend to use the ellipsis quite a bit to indicate a longer pause than the comma. I may be guilty of using it too much. But, I thought your sentence read fine as it is...but maybe the last part would have had just a lingering moments thought before continuing? "once a week now that it’s gotten colder out...but I think I’ve gotten so used to our own natural scents that Eddie smelling like soap is almost distasteful to my nose."
Like I said, this topic has probably already been discussed somewhere else, just thought I'd ask.
I love ellipses!
I'm always afraid I use them too much, but probably half of what I write is my protagonist thinking, pondering, internalizing life, so maybe I use them in the right instances.
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