GoldenMaia
Really Experienced
- Joined
- Jul 21, 2007
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So, my story got bounced back due to 'underage' flag. How much more clear do I need to make it? It's a Wine Bar--you cannot work at a bar if you're under age. And the line in the story says outright:
' Not that it’s any of your business, but since we should just get this out in the open, I’m single. He’s single and over legal age. '
Is it because the jerk in the scene is calling this person a 'boy' as an insult that flags it as underage? (We shouldn't use 'boy' or 'girl' because that means they are underage? Really?)
I changed it to 'punk' rather than boy but it takes the insult out of the comment I think. and also added 'he's 21 for Godsake'.
I am blown away as the first part of the story I call him a young man ...nothing spit back. Of course he's over age--or he wouldn't be working at a flipp'n wine bar.
I really /really/ do not want someone reading my work thinking I'm writing about someone not of age. Ick.
' Not that it’s any of your business, but since we should just get this out in the open, I’m single. He’s single and over legal age. '
Is it because the jerk in the scene is calling this person a 'boy' as an insult that flags it as underage? (We shouldn't use 'boy' or 'girl' because that means they are underage? Really?)
I changed it to 'punk' rather than boy but it takes the insult out of the comment I think. and also added 'he's 21 for Godsake'.
I am blown away as the first part of the story I call him a young man ...nothing spit back. Of course he's over age--or he wouldn't be working at a flipp'n wine bar.
I really /really/ do not want someone reading my work thinking I'm writing about someone not of age. Ick.