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CrimsonMaiden said:My newest story, Daughter of His Heart, has now been posted. As you can probably tell by its title, it is in the Incest Category (had to write one for Survivor.. can't hope for Immunities on everything.) However, it's not your typical run of the mill incest story (and the regular incest lovers are showing their disapproval by its rating). This story actually covers the mental and emotional turmoil that must affect some of the participants of Incest. I ask that you read it, even if Incest usually isn't your thing, and give it a vote based on the writing and the story itself. Personally, I think it's a much better story than what the rating is showing at the moment. I am fairly certain that if it was the normal Dad fucked daughter and both were eager participants from the get go that the rating would be higher, but that isn't the story I wanted to write.
Anyway, I'll stop rambling now. Please read the story and vote for it, and then let me know by feedback or public comment what you think.
Thanks!
PS. While you're at it, how about checking out my story Passion Unveiled (link in siggy) if you haven't already. It's a heartfelt letter to a long distance love. It only has 6 votes, so it needs a little boost. Thanks!
WyldKarde said:Ahhhh, I'm taking a break from writing and I decided to drop in and read a few stories, just to let the forum know I'm still alive. I read TN_Greeneyez's "The Tub", and I enjoyed it.
The writing is top notch, but I think it would be a more solid piece of work if it weren't written in "second person". Your ability to visualize and paint a vivid environment is excellent and the sex is well-paced, growing to a slow burn from word one to "The End".
The only thing that kept bringing me out of the story was the fact that the narrative was aimed directly at me. This is a device that novice writers use (generally when writing erotica) to bring the reader into the story. Your writing speaks for itself and there is no need to grab the reader by the back of the head and push their face into your story.
I haven't read your entire library, which I see is extensive. For all I know, this might just be a little experiemnt with a different narrative perspective so that you can flex your muscles. What I did see in your writing makes me want to read more of your work because your storytelling and scene-building is on par with some of the best writers on the site.
I give it a solid four. I'd give it a five, but I haven't really seen your characters yet. If you put as much attention into the characters in your stories as you do into the fabric of the tale itself, I'm sure I'll be in for another pleasant read the next time I click on one of your links.
Thanks for a fun read.
- Wyld -
Edit: I originally credited this story to elizabetht, but have since corrected my error and acknowledged TN_Greeneyez as the author.
I'm reading elizabeth as we speak...sorry 'bout that.