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Old 04-01-2016, 10:13 PM   #251
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Even with my speakers turned right up I can hardly hear this, perhaps it's the lack of expression in your voice.
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 09-30-2016, 05:00 PM   #252
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Shots, cocktails and a reverie gone mad by todski28

https://soundcloud.com/todski28/shot...-and-a-reverie

Shots, cocktails and a reverie gone mad

There is pressure building
a guitar riff
a drum solo
a voice cutting through the dark
caramel Manhattans dripping from my lips
the luscious salted-sweet and alcohol fire
that mires me in memories
trapping desires in the bulge of my zipper
first hellos wrapped like cyanide in the humidity
clouds full to burst with luscious rain

fingertips walking gently down
their nervous quiver intoxicating the drunken
stupor of my shirt

I know itís just a reverie
a memory
but I can still feel you there
a spark of light twisting, arching, aching

I switch from the sweet burn
to pure flame
as I pour out the hard stuff
lap up salt
slam you down in the elements
the first drops of aqua drip from the heavens
steam rising from the earth
grass-scented liquid passion

Iím drunk on vices (desires) flowing river
coursing rapids
where I shot the chauffeur so I could have you
here in the rain
while Iím still tipsy enough to not give a fuck
about propriety, mucking in the mud

there is a vibe, vibrating like the tingle of static
the build-upÖ.. the pour of more before the gush of release
crashes of lightning that rip the air into ozone
and thunder
liquefied passion running down my chin

the flash of light slashes my mind
all I want is
a refill
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Old 09-30-2016, 07:43 PM   #253
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Shots, cocktails and a reverie gone mad by todski28

https://soundcloud.com/todski28/shot...-and-a-reverie

Shots, cocktails and a reverie gone mad

There is pressure building
a guitar riff
a drum solo
a voice cutting through the dark
caramel Manhattans dripping from my lips
the luscious salted-sweet and alcohol fire
that mires me in memories
trapping desires in the bulge of my zipper
first hellos wrapped like cyanide in the humidity
clouds full to burst with luscious rain

fingertips walking gently down
their nervous quiver intoxicating the drunken
stupor of my shirt

I know itís just a reverie
a memory
but I can still feel you there
a spark of light twisting, arching, aching

I switch from the sweet burn
to pure flame
as I pour out the hard stuff
lap up salt
slam you down in the elements
the first drops of aqua drip from the heavens
steam rising from the earth
grass-scented liquid passion

Iím drunk on vices (desires) flowing river
coursing rapids
where I shot the chauffeur so I could have you
here in the rain
while Iím still tipsy enough to not give a fuck
about propriety, mucking in the mud

there is a vibe, vibrating like the tingle of static
the build-upÖ.. the pour of more before the gush of release
crashes of lightning that rip the air into ozone
and thunder
liquefied passion running down my chin

the flash of light slashes my mind
all I want is
a refill
Hot ................
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 10-05-2016, 12:16 PM   #254
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As requested, audio for The Barfly Effect

https://soundcloud.com/mistress-heat...-barfly-effect
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Old 10-05-2016, 09:22 PM   #255
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As requested, audio for The Barfly Effect

https://soundcloud.com/mistress-heat...-barfly-effect
Loved it, just as I thought i would!
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Old 10-06-2016, 08:09 AM   #256
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https://soundcloud.com/mistress-heat...-barfly-effect
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Loved it, just as I thought i would!
I did too. I never met a southern belle-ish barfly before, but if I did, I bet she'd talk just like this.
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Old 10-06-2016, 09:56 AM   #257
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Loved it, just as I thought i would!
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I did too. I never met a southern belle-ish barfly before, but if I did, I bet she'd talk just like this.
Glad y'all enjoyed it. It was a fun write and read
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Old 07-11-2017, 09:08 AM   #258
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(live write, no edit, live read no edit I should by now probably take this shit more seriously..)
https://soundcloud.com/todski28/soun...-tuesday-night

I search for a moment
when
it tips
when the lines of human kind
shrink
blur into shadows
when yes is the only answer that makes sense

where gasps are wet words
that drip with the intent
of release

because there is a point
when it slides home
the red blush swells
skin prickles

teeth on your wrist
where you're on the tip
of my tongue
I follow the contours
there with you
not looking for a paint by numbers
kinda loving

I want your gasps
your moans
your movement
as my compass

we're driving
through the narrows
hanging tight to the bends
every corner is
driven to the limit

I grip your hips
drag my fingers through your hair
clasped in a fist
pull you onto me

you help me feel
the ground beneath my feet
the gentleness of you hair in my hand
the heat pouring
from your loosed mind

free to roam the unfettered halls
of your own salacious intent
I'm here to help guide you to
the edges of cliffs
here to help you jump
a safe place to fall against

to let go of your inhibitions
to make peace with the fact that this
freedom is a rare moment
you can cry to god
you can unleash

here with my cock
driven to the hilt
of your own desires
divining water in the desert of self doubt

a place where
you can scream out the passions
of fuck
over and over

urged on by release
this place is where
aphrodisiacs lay in unabashed
glory

kneeling in the essence of
animal instincts
where howling at the moon
is perfect
and coming is the only option
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Old 08-01-2017, 08:19 AM   #259
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moan me a tone
https://soundcloud.com/todski28/soun...sday-afternoon

Moan me a tone
on how we fit together
hard teeth sharp that bite deep
moan me a groan
whisper fuck

grasp the air
hold your breath
taste the damn wall
lash the ground and pound the desk
demand the slick slope
hope that the last gasp
rasps from swollen lips
hold tight and restrain the damn wall

stick me in places almost too tight
awash in the sight of empty air
moan me the tones of pleasure
groan against the damn wall
as it bulges fit to bust a gush of
God's water
fold the edges hold
tight
take me into those forbidden places
go for the release
flow over
hold tight
come fold like origami
depth and girth so pliable
so willing flesh
out this moment
break over the damn wall

crush me
in tones and moans that go on
and come again
like waves crash against a stormy shore
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Old 08-06-2017, 08:13 AM   #260
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Hoarse, catch your breath words

https://soundcloud.com/todski28/hoar...-breath-words*

I've tried hard
to be clever
to think of ways to compare or create similies
tried to find depth in metaphor
to find something that describes lust
or feelings
but your heat is too much
sweat is life
and ragged air
is all we can breathe

I've tried to be smart
but all I get is wet and fire

you smell like
you taste like
you are simply
fuck

I don't know if you understand what I'm saying
when we melt together
when the press
slides slick and deep
*
we ride this
beast
until it
collapses
under
the
strain

your words
whispered in the dark

what did you do to me?
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Old 08-12-2017, 07:31 PM   #261
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perfect example of contemporary poetry
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Old 08-13-2017, 05:51 AM   #262
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perfect example of contemporary poetry
I must be flavour of the month a little todski to cap off an evening

welcome ginger, if you have your own examples it would be good to see them, see if we can fire up this old Chevvy and get her running.
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Old 08-13-2017, 08:56 PM   #263
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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