NOIRTRASH
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I chopped my tale, re-arranged the pieces, got rid of the psychotherapist, and wrote a new beginning. The beginning is much better, the middle is tight, and the ending settles things. 6 LIT pages.
BEGINNING: My Troubles Begin.
Bernice stood by the kitchen table tearing the wrapping paper from the carton of cigarettes and liquor bottles I bought. On house arrest she couldn’t go near a liquor store. Me and the law winked at her schemes to dodge her conviction order. I fetched her forbidden fruits, and the probation officer looked the other way, for an occasional affectionate gratuity.
THE END
“Look at your man, Lola. Tell him what you want.” Lola cried as she looked at Leroy. She cried at his humiliation, and also at the thrill of being taken in front of him. She felt sorry for him, yet the anguished expression she saw on his face fed her lust. I took her in front of her man, completely dominating Leroy, and it made her cunt throb in pleasure. She looked into her man’s eyes. “Be quiet while Vinny fucks me, honey.” Then she turned her eyes and lust to me as I raised her legs over my shoulders, thrusting into her, again and again. “Ohhhh, Ohhhhh!” she cried. “Fuck me! Cum inside me! Give me a baby.”
BEGINNING: My Troubles Begin.
Bernice stood by the kitchen table tearing the wrapping paper from the carton of cigarettes and liquor bottles I bought. On house arrest she couldn’t go near a liquor store. Me and the law winked at her schemes to dodge her conviction order. I fetched her forbidden fruits, and the probation officer looked the other way, for an occasional affectionate gratuity.
THE END
“Look at your man, Lola. Tell him what you want.” Lola cried as she looked at Leroy. She cried at his humiliation, and also at the thrill of being taken in front of him. She felt sorry for him, yet the anguished expression she saw on his face fed her lust. I took her in front of her man, completely dominating Leroy, and it made her cunt throb in pleasure. She looked into her man’s eyes. “Be quiet while Vinny fucks me, honey.” Then she turned her eyes and lust to me as I raised her legs over my shoulders, thrusting into her, again and again. “Ohhhh, Ohhhhh!” she cried. “Fuck me! Cum inside me! Give me a baby.”
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