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Old 01-16-2016, 04:30 AM   #3151
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Old 01-24-2016, 03:48 PM   #3152
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Hey I'm new to this and just trying my hand at writing. So please check out my story Emotionless and Emotionless Part 2. I am still working on it, just looking for feedback. Thanks

https://www.literotica.com/s/emotionless-2

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Old 01-25-2016, 01:25 AM   #3153
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Hello, my first story has just been posted.

https://www.literotica.com/s/bigfoots-come-a-knockin

If you like Bigfoots banging college girls, then you should enjoy this.
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Old 01-26-2016, 06:17 AM   #3154
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hello and smooches

Hi all! I am new to the site and just had my first story posted. Please feel free to check out Mending Fences. Its a short story about a very sexy meeting between neighbors. It contains group outdoor sex, oral, anal and is MMF. I have just recently started trying my hand at writing. Hope you like it. Check out the link below.

https://www.literotica.com/s/mending-fences-1
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Old 01-28-2016, 08:46 AM   #3155
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My Valentine's Day Contest entry is up. It is A Valentine's Day Mess. It's getting a good number of views, but despite that, very little in the way of comments.

It's the 8000-word story of a brother and sister from El Salvador who are separated by adoption at a very young age. They're reunited as a Christmas gift from their parents. The story is set in New Mexico and includes some of the traditional superstitions and beliefs of the place. It isn't all fun and games. Incest/Taboo.

Your views, and comments are welcomed.
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Old 01-30-2016, 11:22 AM   #3156
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Talking New author.

Hi all,

New to literotica, been writing for years but never really put it out there for people to read and give feedback.

Currently I have two stories,

1. My Sisters Keeper - https://www.literotica.com/s/my-sisters-keeper-1
Based on personal experience. It is a story of a younger sister who falls for her older sisters husband while trying to seduce him to test his faithfulness to her sister.

2. Neighbourhood Watch - Part 1 - https://www.literotica.com/s/neighbourhood-watch-pt-01
This is a story of a close knit neighbourhood that gets "really close". The first part is about the arrival of the newcomer Dan and he meets the welcoming committee of one.

I'm currently doing part two which is from a differ the perspective but continuing on from part 1.

Comments and feedback are welcome, especially constructive ones.

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Old 01-31-2016, 04:41 PM   #3157
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Smile Entertaining at Home

I've just posted my first story: https://www.literotica.com/s/entertaining-at-home.

A woman kicks out her boorish husband only to find herself entertaining a few of his friends who are stuck in the rain on the night of a big match.

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Old 02-05-2016, 01:04 AM   #3158
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Next ("Millicent's")

Greetings, all. My next story is up, a charming little British-flavoured fable called "A Night At Millicent's"—which is not the name of a person, just to be clear, it's the name of the establishment where this takes place. Link is here: https://www.literotica.com/s/a-night-at-millicents
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Old 02-07-2016, 02:04 PM   #3159
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My newest story is complete. Check it out, comment on it?

Thanks!

https://www.literotica.com/s/winter-break-ch-01-1

Family secrets and hidden desires come to the surface when Tom agrees to come home for the holidays. 5 chapters.
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Old 03-04-2016, 01:31 PM   #3160
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For the readers of male-perspective bisexual tales, beginning to run today in the Gay Male section, a tongue-in-cheek 2012 pen name novella set in Cape May, Luther, under my Lit. name sr71plt:

BLURB:

Luther is a young man seeming to be happily tooling along on the edge of life in the beach resort town of Cape May, New Jersey, only half aware of what is happening around and to him because he was born slow-witted. But what he appears to have been shortchanged in brain cells has been more than made up in physical attributes he inherited from a mixed-race coupling.

Those around him, from his priest to his former teachers to his current employers to jaded rich tourists and a social worker, are eager to take advantage of both of his most apparent traits—his innocence and good humored readiness to please and his arresting physical endowments. The few genuine friends he has—who aren’t so genuine that they shirk from getting in on what he has to offer themselves—feel sorry for his plight and worried for his future. But Luther himself seems happy as a clam and, perhaps, just perhaps, is more in control of what is going on, and less taken advantage of, than anyone suspects.

Luther’s “normal” life as the furniture refinisher for the antique store-owning pair of Tim and Alfred and sometimes fishing trip second mate to the married Rob is set on edge by busybody and judgmental neighbor, Mrs. Watson, when Luther is visited in his home workshop by his former gym teacher, Grant, and by Luther’s new, “special” friend, Keith, who decides that what would make Luther even more perfect would be a Prince Albert ring. When rich, predator yachters Jonathan and Pamela appear on the scene to sail Luther away into a new life of service, Luther is faced with the decision to go with the flow with good humor as he’d always done before to fit into life or to assert his own wants and needs.



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Old 03-05-2016, 04:28 PM   #3161
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Hey guys! Check out my stories!
And comment! Any and all suggestions are a welcome!

This is my first one...it features a very likeable couple and I am sure you'll love them..other storiesu can find in my bio!

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-dirty-masseur
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Old 03-19-2016, 12:18 PM   #3162
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Winter is not yet over

Good readings to everyone.
I would like to point out that a second chapter to the Winter's Tale is up.
As the writing progressed I realized that the limited scope of the previous title A Thanksgiving's Tale was bugging me greatly. I therefore renamed the saga into A Winter's Tale which is much more appropriate.
The second chapter can be found here A Winter's Tale Chapter 2

If you haven't read the first chapter please find and read it first here.

The story is about two girls who have a chance meeting and then the world takes over. It is a long read and has a broad scope of characters.

Thank you very much for the comments so far for the story. It is not over yet.

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Old 03-21-2016, 12:22 AM   #3163
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At His Majesty's Pleasure

New(ish) historical/medieval noncon series with three chapters so far and plenty more to come!

There's intrigue and duplicity, an expansionist conqueror, a kidnapped princess, and much more. The story does focus on characterization and power dynamics, so it'll start out slow before steamy action ensues - just a warning to those who don't like slow buildups!

Chapter 1: https://www.literotica.com/s/at-his-majestys-pleasure
Chapter 2: https://www.literotica.com/s/at-his-...pleasure-ch-02
Chapter 3: https://www.literotica.com/s/at-his-...pleasure-ch-03

Or alternatively, they're listed on the author page: https://www.literotica.com/stories/m...ge=submissions

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Old 03-22-2016, 07:02 AM   #3164
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Next ("Special Deliveries")

Hey all, sorry I have been M.I.A. for a bit, and I neglected to post here about "Voxe" 2 when it appeared, but now my most recent work after that's up and running. It's called "Special Deliveries," and can be found just...here: https://www.literotica.com/s/special-deliveries Please let me know what you think, if you'd like to share your opinion! The gentleman with whom I worked out the ideas and I welcome your feedback (hopefully constructive, of course)! Thanks, Smokey
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Old 03-22-2016, 06:57 PM   #3165
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The eagerly awaited(by at least a half dozen people) chapter three of Siblings with benefits Sins of the Past is up

https://www.literotica.com/s/sibling...the-past-ch-03
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Old 03-26-2016, 02:34 AM   #3166
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Im grateful for the kind comments so far on my first submission to the site.

I was experimenting with a couple of devices, namely animating internal dialogues and an attempt to write dialogue with a broken english speaking character. It felt a little awkward at times when writing it but I'm usually my own worst critic.

Please enjoy.

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Old 03-31-2016, 05:21 AM   #3167
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Good morning everyone!

I have just started coming back to the site (I was last here in 2007!) and am in the process of updating my stories and writing some new ones for fun. Have just had one of my edits approved, would love some feedback if anyone fancies it or would be kind enough to have a read? Looking forward to getting involved in the community again

https://www.literotica.com/s/peeping-shaun

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Old 04-01-2016, 04:11 PM   #3168
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Post Powder and Steel

I'm a new author here, and have posted a new story.

Please feel free to leave any feedback. Thank you so much for those of you who have already done so.

https://www.literotica.com/s/powder-and-steel
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Old 04-19-2016, 09:37 AM   #3169
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Strawberry Epiphany

BDSM with a female dominant and male submissive
about 1500 words

This story is different in that it consists entirely of dialogue spoken by a Mistress while she toys with, or torments, her submissive male.
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Old 04-21-2016, 11:29 PM   #3170
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Next (almost)

I am going to fall asleep before my next story makes it up onto the site, so I will put the link here and ask Readers to please check it out once it's there, a couple more hours from now. It's called "Come Out, Come Out..." and is the second story idea suggested to me by a friend/collaborator. It will be found here—https://www.literotica.com/s/come-out-come-out—and I hope you enjoy it. As I always say, feedback's welcomed, valued and appreciated. Happy reading, and thank you for doing so! —Smokey
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Old 04-22-2016, 12:11 AM   #3171
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Story; Ill Met By Moonlight
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Length; Two lit pages

I'm utter crap at the whole summary thing, but basically the cat gets let out of the bag when (after some hella car sex) Ellie is taken hostage by an escape convict and her boyfriend turns into an 8 foot tall werewolf. Shit hits the fan from there.
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Old 04-27-2016, 09:46 AM   #3172
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I have a new story up called Stones of Incienda. I'll be working on it along with my other major story to keep my creative juices flowing.

Stones of Incienda is basically a story where on the planet of Incienda, the balance of it is disrupted and it's another 'save the world' type scenario. But more importantly the focus will be on the relationship of the main characters. There are 14 of them and it's a big number but I did my best to come up with different personalities for them. This was originally an rpg I created (hence why there's a large cast), but that fell through the cracks.

Anyway, I really hope ya'll give this story a chance. Unlike Dragons of Fraidel, this won't have as many chapters. However, the chapters are long! The other day I was typing something out and already over 80 pages and it's still Ch. 1. Granted, I am almost down with Ch. 1.

Oh, it is a Fantasy, Adventure, Romance type of story. Here's the link to the first part. Let me know what you think. I introduce the first half of the cast here-

https://www.literotica.com/s/stones-...da-ch-01-pt-01
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Stones of Incienda- Fantasy Romance- 7 young woman from around the world of Incienda must fulfill a prophecy to save their planet from destruction.
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Old Yesterday, 01:17 PM   #3173
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New Author/New Story

Hi all, I've just published my first story on literotica yesterday. I'm particularly interested in writing about power play, and I'm definitely open to suggestions and feedback for the next chapters in the Madison James series. I have comments and email turned on, too.

Here's the first:
https://www.literotica.com/s/madison-james-introduction

Short description: Dirty woman submits to the world.
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