Sacrificing For Love

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Excellent. Well written - lot of show, very little tell. No easily spotted grammar or spelling errors. In short, a professional and entertaining story.

Two things to leave out

1. The Korean script. Unless your audience is Korean, in which case, translate the entire story.

2. "This was a public execution". It provides the climax three paragraphs early and the tension is lost right there. Just erase it.

Good luck with your project.