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Old 06-22-2007, 01:48 PM   #1676
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Two Stories :)

They got my two stories up!! So I can show them to you, now. I Really hope you enjoy them, but whether you do or do Not, leave me some feedback. I'm hard-headed and can be unnecessarily proud - so it's good to see what other people are saying. Here are the links.

A Dreamer -- a good bit older than my most current - about 2 years old, now.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/s...y.php?id=315627

Another Day at the Office -- latest and more serious attempt;
http://www.literotica.com/stories/s...y.php?id=315628
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Old 06-23-2007, 04:16 PM   #1677
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Lesbian Stories with an Edge

I'm a relative newcomer to Literotica, but I have several stories up right now if you care to peruse them.

How to describe them? I guess I would say they are lesbian exchanges with an edge. They all take place in public spaces and they are usually anonymous figures with limited dialogue. They are atypical, raw, and sexy (I think).

My link is: http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions
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Old 06-23-2007, 05:05 PM   #1678
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Thumbs up

I'll vouch for everything Lesbia says, I'm in danger of becoming her biggest fan/stalker. I love her sparse dialogue and beautifully painted characters and she's not paying me to say so! Keep writing sweetheart and I'll keep reading.
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Old 06-23-2007, 05:31 PM   #1679
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Wink Mmmmmmmuah!

I adore you, Tribade. Thank you for saying such sweet things.
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Old 06-25-2007, 10:33 AM   #1680
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Looking for readers, reviewers, critics, advice...

http://www.literotica.com:81/stories....php?id=296412

Thanks to anyone who stops by to read :-)
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Old 06-28-2007, 06:13 PM   #1681
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Wink Im a virgin...pls be gentle (or...not)

My first erotic story...threw in a bdsm twist.

Let me know what you think of my gal Adora.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=315355

Appreciate any/all feedback


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Old 07-02-2007, 09:34 AM   #1682
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Latest story published

Hi, my latest story has been published, I'd love feedback and comments. For the time being it's in the exhib/voyeur category, hopefully it will be moved to erotic couplings soon, some sort of mess up put it in the wrong category.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=317158

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Old 07-02-2007, 10:47 AM   #1683
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In All Her Glory

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=317221 - In All Her Glory is my latest piece. The story follows Drew Cotter and the deal he strikes with his wife to try out a new role playing scenario in their bedroom. Much to the enjoyment of the spying girl next door who has had a crush on Drew since high school.

I've felt my writing to be lacking in the character department so this is my first step in trying to improve that.

My other stories and poems can be found at http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions

Please take a read of this latest story I am interested in criticism/advice on how to improve the character elements in particular. As usual any and all feedback on this piece and others is appreciate.

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Old 07-03-2007, 12:06 PM   #1684
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Here's my newest....called "The Moll"

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=317435

It's a different look at the Damsel In Distress / Slave Trader genre with the view of a master criminal's girlfriend.

Enjoy this and see my Yahoo Group....

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/freddies_tales/

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Old 07-05-2007, 09:54 PM   #1685
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It's over. The final chapter of Dire Straits is now out.

Thank you all for your support and your kind thoughts. It was a hell of a ride.

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Old 07-08-2007, 11:52 PM   #1686
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Callista & Logan Reunite Ch 1

Ok go easy on me ok. This is my 1st story. Thanks

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=318177

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Old 07-09-2007, 01:38 PM   #1687
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My first story: http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=310957

If possible, listen to the mp3 as I think that's where I do better work (at least after the first minute or so; you can tell I'm a bit nervous at the start).
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Old 07-09-2007, 02:23 PM   #1688
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My latest addition is out

Ranya Ch.03 is also part of the Nude Day Story contest.

It is set in a fantasy world. The apprentices decide to have Nude gathering, and a new romance starts.

Please tell me what you think.

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Old 07-10-2007, 01:03 PM   #1689
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Susannah Demands

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This is only my second story. I'd appreciate your review.
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Old 07-11-2007, 02:19 AM   #1690
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tennis lesson on nude day

id like to hear your comments, the story might look really amateur since its my first story and i'm not a natural writer so let me know what guys think
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Old 07-11-2007, 08:01 AM   #1691
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I was not all that happy with my nude day entry - it felt like 'write by numbers'. The category assignment spoiled the 'twist', which my editor thought I overly foreshadowed in any event. I'm also not sure the sex quotient is high enough, especially at the end.
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Old 07-12-2007, 03:00 AM   #1692
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It appears while I wasn't looking today, they posted Squirt, my latest fiasco.


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Old 07-12-2007, 10:12 AM   #1693
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It appears while I wasn't looking today, they posted Squirt, my latest fiasco.


http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=318567

Jenny Jenny
Cute story
but - there were more than a few typos and words that were in the wrong tense...
I expect that you saw them after they posted it???

The upshot is that its really cute and fun!
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Old 07-12-2007, 12:18 PM   #1694
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Jenny Jenny
Cute story
but - there were more than a few typos and words that were in the wrong tense...
I expect that you saw them after they posted it???

The upshot is that its really cute and fun!
That's just part of the fun, Christabell
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Old 07-14-2007, 05:02 PM   #1695
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Nice voice. Needs a bit of editing.

Not much of a real story, like the humor, but no character development. As you like to say, a vignette.
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Old 07-15-2007, 12:00 PM   #1696
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Ch. 2 for Callista & Logan Reunite.
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Old 07-16-2007, 02:16 PM   #1697
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Old 07-18-2007, 11:00 AM   #1698
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I have a new story posted in Erotic Couplings A Busy Week chapter 3
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Old 07-20-2007, 01:04 AM   #1699
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Hi all,

I'm a new writer here, though not a new reader. I've read and appreciated many of your stories anonymously for a while.

I've gotten some very encouraging feedback from readers already, but it would be nice to hear from other writers and know what you think I could do better. For example, I tend to neglect physical descriptions. I'd like to know what would make my stories more satisfying to all.

I have two ongoing series right now:

"The Checkout Girl"
-- Chapter 1
-- Chapter 2
-- (Chapter 3 in the hopper)

"A Karate Love Story"
-- Chapter 1
-- Chapter 2
-- (Chapter 3 in the hopper)

Cheers to all!
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Old 07-21-2007, 03:55 AM   #1700
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