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Old 05-31-2004, 06:38 AM   #426
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Smile New Story

Having been away for a while due to, well, stuff, I completely missed this thread.

So, hello again to anyone who knew me before, and hello to anyone who didn't know me from a hole in the floor.

This story was released approximately a month ago, and it's taken me that time to find my way around the place again. As always, I'd love feedback on any aspect of the story.

My Best Friend's Girl Ch 03

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Old 06-06-2004, 09:27 AM   #427
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Howdy, chapter 8 of Innocent Pawn is posted:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=146458

A few issues are resolved in this chapter - particularly their feelings for one another. And Bella shows a bit of backbone! So hope you like it, but if not, let me know why!

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Old 06-10-2004, 05:28 PM   #428
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My first attempt at a nonhuman story.

The Ancient Rite

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Old 06-10-2004, 06:14 PM   #429
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Um, Elizabetht?
How come you have a personalized title although your posts have not yet reached 1,000?

I'll read your story later, but this just struck me right now.

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Old 06-10-2004, 06:30 PM   #430
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My first time at writing Gay Male story

Hi everyone,

I have never posted any of my stories here before to be read and voted on and yes I would like feed back on my work. I wasn't always an author and I think , ok I feel my writing is improving.

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Old 06-10-2004, 06:40 PM   #431
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Whispering Wolf57 would like

To Have his story voted on
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Old 06-10-2004, 10:28 PM   #432
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Um, Elizabetht?
How come you have a personalized title although your posts have not yet reached 1,000?

I'll read your story later, but this just struck me right now.

Because I am a moderator.
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Old 06-11-2004, 03:27 AM   #433
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Old 06-11-2004, 09:29 AM   #434
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Morning people

Hi if you wouldn't mind helping me out I'm trying to get a few stories to 10 votes.

Thanks for your time - Jo

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=129557

Needs 3 votes

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Old 06-11-2004, 10:42 PM   #435
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Hi all,

New one: in the exhibitionist/voyeur category...

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Old 06-12-2004, 03:45 PM   #436
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Divorced, Mother, Prostitute

My latest story has just been posted. I like it, but then, I'm more than just biased!

It's about a woman that meets her ex-husband once a month. She fixes him lunch and he gives her the child support check. As had become the norm, as he leaves she asks him for a little more. This time, he wants a little more as well.

Divorced, Mother, Prostitute

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Old 06-13-2004, 10:00 PM   #437
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Room Girls

Chapter 3 of my Room Girls came out a couple of days ago. It's in the Toys Masterbation cateragory and I fear not getting as much attention due to this.
So someone please read the baby, I think it's one of my best.

I don't know how to make a link it's in new stories right now. Came out on the 10th I think it's called

Room Girls Ch 03

Also these two came out soon with it, and need a glance.

Painting Lessons (interracial)
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Old 06-14-2004, 02:30 PM   #438
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I have a new story, Soon, that I've received some decent feedback on almost immediately, and then it dried up. It needs some help...please?

Thanks!!!

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ps - I received one PC stated that the premise was ridiculous, but strange as it may seem, it's a basically true story, and the detail that Anonymous objected to was not something I had changed.
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Old 06-17-2004, 11:05 AM   #439
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I'm still dealing with Writers' Block but I just posted my first new story in months. It's yet another rewrite of a previously unpublished piece done in 1982. It splits fairly neatly into three parts: Lesbian, Group and Interracial so I decided to separate it thusly. The only public comment to date indicates that , as a male, I know nothing about lesbian sex. Voting is divided so far but viewing is growing rapidly. Comments would be welcomed from any and all.Pop Music Ch. 1
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Old 06-17-2004, 01:13 PM   #440
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Old 06-18-2004, 02:25 AM   #441
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My nude day competition entry has been posted. It is a lame romance story. But just because I think it is lame, that doesn't mean it deserves a score of 2 or thereabouts, at least a 3 dammit!

It is about the universitysl clothes drive, and cheerleaders stripping because they lost a bet and a romance thrown in.

Read at own peril.

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Old 06-18-2004, 10:44 AM   #442
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I have a new story, Soon, that I've received some decent feedback on almost immediately, and then it dried up. It needs some help...please?

Thanks!!!

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ps - I received one PC stated that the premise was ridiculous, but strange as it may seem, it's a basically true story, and the detail that Anonymous objected to was not something I had changed.
I had already read your story but looking back now, I see you have gotten lots of positive comments in the meantime.

Just in case you are still smarting from that anonymous silly, I wrote a story for an online friend about what would happen if we would meet. Highly unlikely since we're talking different continents here, but I did not even let him near my house. LOL

The story is called Face to Face.

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Old 06-21-2004, 11:15 AM   #443
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My new story called "The Chef" is now online

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Does advertising make a difference. It feels sort of wrong for me. At least I've never advertised any of my stories here.
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Old 06-23-2004, 03:51 AM   #445
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Re: Room Girls

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Originally posted by cheeryorchid
Chapter 3 of my Room Girls came out a couple of days ago. It's in the Toys Masterbation cateragory and I fear not getting as much attention due to this.
So someone please read the baby, I think it's one of my best.

I don't know how to make a link it's in new stories right now. Came out on the 10th I think it's called

Room Girls Ch 03

Also these two came out soon with it, and need a glance.

Painting Lessons (interracial)
Meet Quinn Wrigley (erotic couple)
Please post a link to the story here. I would click on it and check it out if there was a link in your post or signature. Just copy the URL or Address and paste it in your post. That's easy.

But many of us are too lazy to go search for it, so help us out if you want us to read it.
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Old 06-23-2004, 05:58 PM   #446
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I have a new story up - the second in the chain "Superstitions" (link in my sig).

It's being overlooked, I think, but I don't know why. I would hugely appreciate it if some were so kind as to give it a read, a vote, a PC, anything.

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Old 06-25-2004, 10:20 AM   #447
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It's called Alex and is in the Lesbian section.

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Old 06-25-2004, 04:01 PM   #448
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Old 06-26-2004, 01:13 PM   #449
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I have a new story up - the second in the chain "Superstitions" (link in my sig).

It's being overlooked, I think, but I don't know why. I would hugely appreciate it if some were so kind as to give it a read, a vote, a PC, anything.
Same thing seems to be happening to mine, it's chapter 5 in the same chain "Superstitions".

Hardly any votes. Is it so bad people merely back klick?

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Old 06-28-2004, 02:09 AM   #450
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Thumbs up New story is posted

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