AKentuckyLady
Damsel in Defiance
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Hi,
I've never posted/published and I'm in the middle of revising a story I wrote a long time ago. I need a suggestion on where I should go next in my story. Here are the last three paragraphs (please, be gentle):
It was like a bolt of lightning; a muffled scream passed through my lips and my pussy instantly slid into another orgasm. I couldn’t think, I couldn’t breathe; all I could do was hold on as my body shuddered over and over. Every nerve ending between my legs snapped and popped and my vision went dark for a moment. Dimly, it occurred to me that I might be on the verge of passing out.
“Mmmmm, yes,” his voice rumbled into my ear, penetrating through the hazy pleasure as my orgasm started to slow. He removed his hand from my mouth and steadied me on my feet as my chest heaved, drawing cool night air into my lungs.
Above the satisfying sounds of hearing her trying to catch her breath, he heard a deeper rustling behind him, near the trees. He turned his head sharply, his gaze scanning the thicket behind them, but the dark shadows in the pines didn’t reveal anything. He listened for a moment more but nothing else came to his ears. He turned his attention back to the luscious woman in his arms, ready to begin again.
I'd like to give my male character the chance to have his own orgasm, while likely bringing her to another one. Here's my problem:
1) Missionary seems a little too tame for what's already occurred.
2) He could bend her back over and go to town from behind, but that's already happened, he just didn't finish. Seems...lazy.
3) He could sit/lay on a chair or chaise lounge with her on top. But she's already had two orgasms, and from my own viewpoint, there's no way I'd have the strength in my thighs to be able to move in the manner required. I'd be pretty limp.
4) They can't stop and rest - obviously they are outside and are probably being watched.
So, any suggestions? I'd appreciate any comments
I've never posted/published and I'm in the middle of revising a story I wrote a long time ago. I need a suggestion on where I should go next in my story. Here are the last three paragraphs (please, be gentle):
It was like a bolt of lightning; a muffled scream passed through my lips and my pussy instantly slid into another orgasm. I couldn’t think, I couldn’t breathe; all I could do was hold on as my body shuddered over and over. Every nerve ending between my legs snapped and popped and my vision went dark for a moment. Dimly, it occurred to me that I might be on the verge of passing out.
“Mmmmm, yes,” his voice rumbled into my ear, penetrating through the hazy pleasure as my orgasm started to slow. He removed his hand from my mouth and steadied me on my feet as my chest heaved, drawing cool night air into my lungs.
Above the satisfying sounds of hearing her trying to catch her breath, he heard a deeper rustling behind him, near the trees. He turned his head sharply, his gaze scanning the thicket behind them, but the dark shadows in the pines didn’t reveal anything. He listened for a moment more but nothing else came to his ears. He turned his attention back to the luscious woman in his arms, ready to begin again.
I'd like to give my male character the chance to have his own orgasm, while likely bringing her to another one. Here's my problem:
1) Missionary seems a little too tame for what's already occurred.
2) He could bend her back over and go to town from behind, but that's already happened, he just didn't finish. Seems...lazy.
3) He could sit/lay on a chair or chaise lounge with her on top. But she's already had two orgasms, and from my own viewpoint, there's no way I'd have the strength in my thighs to be able to move in the manner required. I'd be pretty limp.
4) They can't stop and rest - obviously they are outside and are probably being watched.
So, any suggestions? I'd appreciate any comments