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IMHO it would really help if you included a link, either to the story itself in the post, or to your submissions page in your .sig. A story that isn't easy to find likely won't be read much.
Really? You are clearly capable of writing imagination inducing descriptions, so why do you keep taking these shortcuts?Sexy computer voice:
made it red just for you
Anyone, like me, who has sig lines turned off, isn't going to see the link no matter what color you made it, if you put it in your sig line. No link shows in my view.
You shouldn't need to defend yourself here. All that information should be in the story. If it isn't, well, that's part of your problem.
Your next is that you're starting too many plot threads. We begin with your frame story about how this is after the war; then we go to the frame story about how these people are looking for the Littopians of whatever; and THEN we have Capt. Harry Whateverhisface, running the life form scan without the help of any other characters. By now, I'm bored. You have too many dangling threads and not enough answers. You've recognized that in science-fiction, it's smart to withhold some explanations and keep The Reader curious. The problem is that you've gone overboard on that idea. I don't know who the Littopians are, I don't know why Captain Harry wants to find them, I don't know what wiper drive is, I don't know who the other alien races are (turians? Klingon? Minbari? Necrons? Formics? Wookiees?) or why xenocide was considered necessary... And instead of answering ANY of these questions you introduce me to a litany of clichéd stereotypes: sobbing drunkard, idiot, Asian martial-arts girl (a threefer token minority!).
And that's when I hit the [Back] button.
I don't trust you as a writer. You don't seem to know where the heart of your story lies. You can't keep me interested in your core premise (and don't tell me it's because I'm lacking in patience unless you too have slogged through all 12,000 pages of The Wheel of Time). Your characters are boring. I didn't even need to get to that immature nonsense about Planet Asshole and the Rectum Nebula--I don't trust you to tell this story well. And when I can buy things like Dune or go over to Nick Scipio's site for free, your work is a waste of my time.
You keep doing and writing whatever makes you happy. I'm not your audiencd, but that doesn't mean your audience doesn't exist. In fact, the feedback left on your story suggests that it does. So keep writing. But speaking only for myself, I'm steering clear of your planet of assholes.
I love "The Wheel of Time" series. Robert Jordan was an incredible writer. But I didn't make it past the first paragraph of this story. Sorry. I didn't read enough to give insightful feedback. It just didn't turn my crank from the very start.don't tell me it's because I'm lacking in patience unless you too have slogged through all 12,000 pages of The Wheel of Time).
It's a farce. and I think you'd make a fine inhabitant of the planet.
and I don't know why I bothered replying
because responding to your comment is definitely a waste of mine.
I saw the tag line and that was it for me. Sorry. Good luck in the future.
Then block me. I'm doing the same to you. We'll both be happier.
Best of luck to you in the future.
clearly you can write well enough to engage an audience, Harry, as the red H on every single other piece of your prose fiction testifies.
how people miss the farce aspect of this and ask questions like 'what is littopia?' is beyond me. it's no stretch to connect that with the site name, the sexual content as a nod to lit's nature as a site, nor the assholians from the planet rectum with those who appear to live up their own. (and then there's the legendary reputation of the General Board )
all those trademark symbols link directly to the author's note before the tale opens, and i do believe this was written very much tongue-in-cheek in places: for example, reading some of your characters had me visualising certain members of the poetry forum playing their parts. perhaps it's my familiarity with your Chosen Mate story, individuals from several forums here at lit, and the understanding of this being something of a christmas special aiming for humour rather than deadly-serious on-point sci-fi, that allows me to read and appreciate it. of course, if you placed it under sci-fi rather than sci-fantasy (is there that option?), perhaps that's why some are responding the way they are
Hoochie-Mama? love it.