Jeannette_Savage
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So, a while ago I wrote this story:
https://www.literotica.com/s/treasure-beyond-treasure
and posted it unfinished (the first version ended when he spurns her in her library). Of course, it got a low rating because of the incomplete and unsatisfactory ending. I have since completed the story more to my liking, but as stories go on here, they do not bounce to the top when re-edited. With the section it's in (Celebrities and fanfic), it also receives little attention.
This feels a rather vain thread, but I hope to get eyes on this work and see what some seasoned readers think.
Also, I want to know if said readers - hopefully Thief franchise fans - think of my version of Garrett. When I wrote the story, I had only played the Thief 3: Deadly Shadows. After the story was finished, I played the new Thief (2014) and found some likenesses in the quality of writing from Garrett to Garrett (he is very different between game 3 and 4).
I had a difficult time sexualizing him, as in the 3rd game, only a singular fence bothers to comment on him, and she's sort of a floozy.
Give it a read and tell me what you think! (Warning: Some spoilers)
Side note: Don't bother telling me about grammar. As I've said in previous posts, mine is fine compared to the drivel of many stories on this site, and I don't bother editing too heavily on stories I'm not being paid to write.
https://www.literotica.com/s/treasure-beyond-treasure
and posted it unfinished (the first version ended when he spurns her in her library). Of course, it got a low rating because of the incomplete and unsatisfactory ending. I have since completed the story more to my liking, but as stories go on here, they do not bounce to the top when re-edited. With the section it's in (Celebrities and fanfic), it also receives little attention.
This feels a rather vain thread, but I hope to get eyes on this work and see what some seasoned readers think.
Also, I want to know if said readers - hopefully Thief franchise fans - think of my version of Garrett. When I wrote the story, I had only played the Thief 3: Deadly Shadows. After the story was finished, I played the new Thief (2014) and found some likenesses in the quality of writing from Garrett to Garrett (he is very different between game 3 and 4).
I had a difficult time sexualizing him, as in the 3rd game, only a singular fence bothers to comment on him, and she's sort of a floozy.
Give it a read and tell me what you think! (Warning: Some spoilers)
Side note: Don't bother telling me about grammar. As I've said in previous posts, mine is fine compared to the drivel of many stories on this site, and I don't bother editing too heavily on stories I'm not being paid to write.