Editor wanted - causual sex/light bondage/group sex

xxjimboxx

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I wrote a store for a friend of mine. After she read it, I thought I would try my hand here. It was rejected for issues with dialog. While I can go through and fix that, I know there is other stuff I will miss. I am bad at editing my own stuff.

Would someone here be willing to take a look at it?

Thanks

excerpt:
“What’s wrong?” you ask, as if you didn’t know “Am I not dressed well enough?”
“No, no, not that. You are gorgeous. I just feel underdressed compared to you.” I respond. I am standing there in black slacks and black dress shirt. Nothing to fancy.
You giggle as you step in close “I think you look just fine.” You tell me right before you kiss me.
The kiss starts light but quickly gets more intense. I run my hands down your back to your ass. I rub it through the dress. I start to go lower, but you turn out of my arms. “Now now, no time for that. We’ll be late.” As we go to car, I think to myself that it did not feel like you were wearing panties under that dress.
 
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