First ever story - feedback/suggestions?

So this is my first story that I've ever published. I kind of wrote it out of my own fantasies but decided to upload it and see what people think. It seems to have good feedback from users so far, but I'm curious as to what other writers here think could be improved (I'm not exactly a skillful writer lol).

Anyways, enjoy:

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-trio-ch-01-1

Yeah, a good hot little story. A simple but good idea, nicely done. Five.

I enjoyed it. Quick, easy to follow, no major errors and - hallelujah - a male protagonist who is not sporting a huge dick. Plus, a fleshlight - love watching men use those.

ausfet said:

I enjoyed it. Quick, easy to follow, no major errors and - hallelujah - a male protagonist who is not sporting a huge dick. Plus, a fleshlight - love watching men use those.

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haha yeah I can't help but laugh a bit when I read a story and the narrator just casually drops in a mention of their 10-inch dick

electricblue66 said:

Yeah, a good hot little story. A simple but good idea, nicely done. Five.

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thanks, glad you enjoyed it!