WickedEve
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Tuesday 11-23
A couple of poems to get your day started right:
Two hours
by tungtied2u ©
Two hours
that's all
the distance between us
but just as well
any closer
I would be in you
This poem is full of longing and lust. And yes, "lust" is on my list of no-no cliche words, but a good poet can surround those words with lots of wonderful phrasing and originality. So go read and comment. Our number of poetry comments seem to be down lately. Aren't you people still reading? You better be. You're missing a lot of good poetry if you're not.
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Target Infidelity
by flyguy69 ©
Target Infidelity
by flyguy69 ©
::
Brenda came from out of the blue, well,
out of Shoes, really, her caged possessions
before her. A near-collision of hearts
and carts as I turned to see if toddler summer
was on clearance, yet. Tires squealed
their surprise at her hair-flip appearance
as we froze in headlight smiles.
What a wonderfully fun read. This poem is filled with clever phrasing. And it had me thinking, "infidelity on clearance in aisle seven!" Also, this poem is an excellent example of showing and not telling. Now, it's time for readers to do some showing. Show the flyguy how much you dig his poem.
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A couple of poems to get your day started right:
Two hours
by tungtied2u ©
Two hours
that's all
the distance between us
but just as well
any closer
I would be in you
This poem is full of longing and lust. And yes, "lust" is on my list of no-no cliche words, but a good poet can surround those words with lots of wonderful phrasing and originality. So go read and comment. Our number of poetry comments seem to be down lately. Aren't you people still reading? You better be. You're missing a lot of good poetry if you're not.
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Target Infidelity
by flyguy69 ©
Target Infidelity
by flyguy69 ©
::
Brenda came from out of the blue, well,
out of Shoes, really, her caged possessions
before her. A near-collision of hearts
and carts as I turned to see if toddler summer
was on clearance, yet. Tires squealed
their surprise at her hair-flip appearance
as we froze in headlight smiles.
What a wonderfully fun read. This poem is filled with clever phrasing. And it had me thinking, "infidelity on clearance in aisle seven!" Also, this poem is an excellent example of showing and not telling. Now, it's time for readers to do some showing. Show the flyguy how much you dig his poem.
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