LoquiSordidaAdMe
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Hi Everyone,
I've just finished writing my second story. I'm pretty confident about the grammar and punctuation, but I've read it so many times that I can't feel the rough spots any more. I really need someone who can tell me where the narrative is confusing, where the story drags, that sort of thing. I don't need help fixing any problems, I just need a second set of eyes to spot them.
This story is about a woman who was dumped by her fiancee and ends up hooking up with a guy in a campsite while backpacking the Appalachian Trail. No rape, scat, piss, etc. The Ex/Voy aspect is as kinky as it gets.
I'd love to get some feedback from someone with little to no experience with backpacking or camping to make sure those parts of the story are communicated well.
PM me if you are interested. Thanks for your consideration.
-Loqui Sordida
I've just finished writing my second story. I'm pretty confident about the grammar and punctuation, but I've read it so many times that I can't feel the rough spots any more. I really need someone who can tell me where the narrative is confusing, where the story drags, that sort of thing. I don't need help fixing any problems, I just need a second set of eyes to spot them.
This story is about a woman who was dumped by her fiancee and ends up hooking up with a guy in a campsite while backpacking the Appalachian Trail. No rape, scat, piss, etc. The Ex/Voy aspect is as kinky as it gets.
I'd love to get some feedback from someone with little to no experience with backpacking or camping to make sure those parts of the story are communicated well.
PM me if you are interested. Thanks for your consideration.
-Loqui Sordida
