Extended Author Notes for "My Lingerie-Loving Sister Moves In"

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The story behind the story
This story fell in place really fast. I had the thought “What if a brother and sister were to have sex and immediately regretted it?” That got the story rolling. I picked Houston as the Astros are having a great season after years and years of mediocrity. 56 seasons and have been to the World Series once, an 0-4 sweep. I was trying to come up with reasons why Nora broke up with her former boyfriend, decided that it was on different spending priorities (fights about money are always about different spending priorities) and had the idea that her ex-boyfriend had been upset with how much Nora spent on lingerie. That took me to Nora being a lover of lingerie. Long ago, I read a thread in Literotica’s Authors’ Hangout and some woman had posted that lingerie was all about making her feel good, not her man. I gave Nora that attitude.

I spent a lot of time watching porn videos with lingerie and checking out lingerie websites. The sacrifices I make for my readers. Before I started writing the story, I had stumbled upon The Saturdays’ Just Can’t Get Enough which is a very catchy song and has lots and lots of lingerie. All the lingerie was based on items on I saw on lingerie websites except for the corset, which I made up. All of the corsets I saw are about the same length and I had to have some reason why Nora initially rejected wearing one but wound up doing so.

Nora’s dress on their big night was inspired by this video. I was disappointed by the video as she’s wearing this sexy dress with stockings, there’s a scene change and she’s in just lingerie sucking some guy’s dick. I wanted to see a slow reveal with lots of kisses. So the scene in Greg’s bedroom was inspired by what I wish had been in that video.

Originally, I had Greg and Nora feel awkward around each other just because they had sex once. The initial description of ‘The Night’ was “After I pumped my third load into her, we cuddle up and went to sleep.” When it came time to write them discussing ‘The Night’, I decided to make it as I wrote it - that the first time being a disaster worked much better.

The title was originally going to be “We’re Definitely Not Going To…” with the quotation marks. It’s how the story starts and ends. But it’s not very descriptive. “My Lingerie-Loving Sister Moves In” is more descriptive and I thought it would get more clicks.

I had six beta-readers this time. Based on their feedback, I made a lot of changes but none of them were very big.

What happens next?
Short-term, things continue as they are.

What do I particularly like about this story?
* Lingerie! It was a lot of fun doing research on the different pieces of lingerie that Nora wore
* It’s a different structure in that they have sex, it fucks them up for years and then they struggle to overcome that awkwardness and eventually fall in love
* It was nice to come up with a story idea for some older characters
* I spent a lot of time trying to cut out the flab in the story. Hopefully it shows

What do I think I might get grief about?
* My limited knowledge of lingerie might trip me up. In particular, the issue of panties over or under garter belt straps
* My limited knowledge of how lawyers act

What were the inspirations for the sex scenes?
* The fuck just inside the apartment was inspired by two videos I found while searching for lingerie porn. Everything in those two videos was exactly the same in the videos except for the teen-aged women - the same overweight, older guy in the same room holding the same video camera while the woman held the same table

What of note got cut from this story?
Nothing

Major editing changes for the story as it was written?
I futzed with why Nora and Kevin broke up. Initially, it was because things got stale between them and then Kevin started taking Nora for granted. Too short of a time for that. So I changed it to that they weren’t compatible in how they wound down. That didn’t work either. So with some inspiration from one of my beta-readers, I changed it to that they weren’t resolving the big issues.

Any other notes?
No

I’m looking for beta-readers
Tell me what you think of my stories before I publish them. I’m looking particularly for female ones. I promise to not hit on you - I just want your perspective
 
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On a serious note, how do you put the blue links in your stories?
You can only put links in your story if they are pointing to a page on literotica.

I don't know if you can do it if you are uploading a Word document. I write all my stuff using Scrivener and insert HTML tags for italics and bold as I write.

Here's the final block of the story I submitted today:
<i>Author’s Notes:<br>* A huge thanks to my editor Tigersman and the others who contributed to this story: Anomic, TM, Dante, Zoomie69, George Fawkes and AwkwardMD<br>* A thanks to silkstockingslover, whose stories I enjoy and who inspired me to have Nora wear silk stockings<br>* Please vote and comment! They are my only “payment” for this story<br>* If you liked the story, you should read my <a href=http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=1462391>extended Author’s Notes</a><br>* If you find any typos or grammar problems, please PM them to me and I will post a cleaned up version of this story<br>* If you send me a PM, please have a valid email address on your LitE account so I can reply back if I choose<br>* I have several other stories similar to this one. Click <a href=http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1535121&page=submissions>here</a> to read them.</i>
 
Note: These are extended Author’s Notes for a story that hasn’t been posted yet. I’ll provide a link to the story once it is posted. Until then, I suggest you don’t read this as it contains lots of spoilers.

Suggestion accepted. I assure you, I won't read the rest of this post (or your story).

Just curious, what's the point of all of this posturing?
 
Just curious, what's the point of all of this posturing?
I tried different ways of getting readers from my story to my extended author notes. What I've found works best is to create to post the extended author notes in this forum and then put a link to them at the end of my story. That means this thread has to be created before I submit my story. Monday, it should be published and I'll update the OP to have a link to the story.
 
The first part of the story read like a report and almost had me quit the story, there was no real emotion there. It reminded me of a "last episode on..." recap. That's a pity because the rest of the story read great. I really liked it.
 
The first part of the story read like a report and almost had me quit the story, there was no real emotion there. It reminded me of a "last episode on..." recap. That's a pity because the rest of the story read great. I really liked it.
A number of people didn't like the start, though their complaint was that they wanted a full description of the first time and not a short summary.

As for it sounding like there was no emotion, it's meant to come across as so painful that he doesn't want to go into details.
 
A number of people didn't like the start, though their complaint was that they wanted a full description of the first time and not a short summary.

As for it sounding like there was no emotion, it's meant to come across as so painful that he doesn't want to go into details.

Hm, I get your intention. Maybe a thrown in "it wasn't a memory I was fond of", "I cringed everytime I thought back" or something similar would've made things clearer for the casual reader.
 
Really enjoyed the story. You should change the Astros part given that they beat the Dodgers to win their first WS title just a few minutes ago :). That was probably the only downer in the story!
 
Really enjoyed the story. You should change the Astros part given that they beat the Dodgers to win their first WS title just a few minutes ago :). That was probably the only downer in the story!
I just posted a comment saying that readers pointed out a couple of errors and I've been holding off on submitted a corrected version until I knew how the Astros did. Greg and Nora will watch the victory parade together.
 
Well, though it bums me to say so-congrats to the Astros and their fans.
 
I thought this was a very enjoyable story, with great pacing and build up. It was well edited, which made it easier and more fun to read. It definitely is one of the better stories in its category. I didn't have a problem with the beginning, either. It was in keeping with the slow but sure buildup, which is a big part of what makes the story a success.

And congrats on the Astros beating the Dodgers.
 
Story is here.

The story behind the story
This story fell in place really fast. I had the thought “What if a brother and sister were to have sex and immediately regretted it?” That got the story rolling. I picked Houston as the Astros are having a great season after years and years of mediocrity. 56 seasons and have been to the World Series once, an 0-4 sweep. I was trying to come up with reasons why Nora broke up with her former boyfriend, decided that it was on different spending priorities (fights about money are always about different spending priorities) and had the idea that her ex-boyfriend had been upset with how much Nora spent on lingerie. That took me to Nora being a lover of lingerie. Long ago, I read a thread in Literotica’s Authors’ Hangout and some woman had posted that lingerie was all about making her feel good, not her man. I gave Nora that attitude.

I spent a lot of time watching porn videos with lingerie and checking out lingerie websites. The sacrifices I make for my readers. Before I started writing the story, I had stumbled upon The Saturdays’ Just Can’t Get Enough which is a very catchy song and has lots and lots of lingerie. All the lingerie was based on items on I saw on lingerie websites except for the corset, which I made up. All of the corsets I saw are about the same length and I had to have some reason why Nora initially rejected wearing one but wound up doing so.

Nora’s dress on their big night was inspired by this video. I was disappointed by the video as she’s wearing this sexy dress with stockings, there’s a scene change and she’s in just lingerie sucking some guy’s dick. I wanted to see a slow reveal with lots of kisses. So the scene in Greg’s bedroom was inspired by what I wish had been in that video.

Originally, I had Greg and Nora feel awkward around each other just because they had sex once. The initial description of ‘The Night’ was “After I pumped my third load into her, we cuddle up and went to sleep.” When it came time to write them discussing ‘The Night’, I decided to make it as I wrote it - that the first time being a disaster worked much better.

The title was originally going to be “We’re Definitely Not Going To…” with the quotation marks. It’s how the story starts and ends. But it’s not very descriptive. “My Lingerie-Loving Sister Moves In” is more descriptive and I thought it would get more clicks.

I had six beta-readers this time. Based on their feedback, I made a lot of changes but none of them were very big.

What happens next?
Short-term, things continue as they are.

What do I particularly like about this story?
* Lingerie! It was a lot of fun doing research on the different pieces of lingerie that Nora wore
* It’s a different structure in that they have sex, it fucks them up for years and then they struggle to overcome that awkwardness and eventually fall in love
* It was nice to come up with a story idea for some older characters
* I spent a lot of time trying to cut out the flab in the story. Hopefully it shows

What do I think I might get grief about?
* My limited knowledge of lingerie might trip me up. In particular, the issue of panties over or under garter belt straps
* My limited knowledge of how lawyers act

What were the inspirations for the sex scenes?
* The fuck just inside the apartment was inspired by two videos I found while searching for lingerie porn. Everything in those two videos was exactly the same in the videos except for the teen-aged women - the same overweight, older guy in the same room holding the same video camera while the woman held the same table

What of note got cut from this story?
Nothing

Major editing changes for the story as it was written?
I futzed with why Nora and Kevin broke up. Initially, it was because things got stale between them and then Kevin started taking Nora for granted. Too short of a time for that. So I changed it to that they weren’t compatible in how they wound down. That didn’t work either. So with some inspiration from one of my beta-readers, I changed it to that they weren’t resolving the big issues.

Any other notes?
No

I’m looking for beta-readers
Tell me what you think of my stories before I publish them. I’m looking particularly for female ones. I promise to not hit on you - I just want your perspective


I have read a number of your stories and LOVED EVERY ONE of them. My only negative is the length. They are all perfect, but I prefer stories that are 2-4 pages in length. I work full time and do not have the lime to read long stories. MY EUROPEAN VACATION WAS WORTH THE TIME.
 
I just posted a comment saying that readers pointed out a couple of errors and I've been holding off on submitted a corrected version until I knew how the Astros did. Greg and Nora will watch the victory parade together.


The "A Week At The Lake" is a favorite. I loved the threesome at the end. However, I did get a little loss toward the end with the manipulation.
I was a little put off my Kaitln's sex with Paul. She was screaming during sex with a guy that was a jerk. A beautiful girl like Kaitlin and he was playing video games when he could have been sucking her pussy and tits. It made her look like a SLUT. I thought she and Paul only same once. In the first I thought they were fucking twice the first couple of nights.
Still a story that kept my cock HARD.

PROP69
 
My lingerie loving sister moves in..

After my third read over this outstanding piece, I have to ask…..do you have any insight on whether they ever got invited to the lawyer’s sky box at the Astro games? And did Nora get invited to join Bill’s firm with a nice promotion and better career path?
Plus, Bill’s firm likely is National, if not international, so if Greg and Nora truly do want to be a couple, he could be their vehicle to moving to a new city/ country to live their lives together.
Gads! I am 67 been married 35 years, soon to be 36, and sometimes these stories make me think about my choices in life and I get that :” What the Hell was I thinking?!”
I sure hope Deja’ Vu is an indication that we do this whole thing more than once! I have got to do things differently next time around.

Okay, enough of “psychoanalyze Uncle Al”. What about the story? What were your thoughts?

Al
 
After my third read over this outstanding piece, I have to ask…..do you have any insight on whether they ever got invited to the lawyer’s sky box at the Astro games? And did Nora get invited to join Bill’s firm with a nice promotion and better career path?
Plus, Bill’s firm likely is National, if not international, so if Greg and Nora truly do want to be a couple, he could be their vehicle to moving to a new city/ country to live their lives together.
Gads! I am 67 been married 35 years, soon to be 36, and sometimes these stories make me think about my choices in life and I get that :” What the Hell was I thinking?!”
I sure hope Deja’ Vu is an indication that we do this whole thing more than once! I have got to do things differently next time around.

Okay, enough of “psychoanalyze Uncle Al”. What about the story? What were your thoughts?
Most of my stories, I have musings about what happens after the story ends. For a few, I have a sequel planned. For this story, I've got nothing. I've got no scenes in my head for their ski vacation. Nora may change firms as long as the new firm is close to their apartment. Greg and Nora are happy as they are, and I don't see them significantly changing their life together anytime soon.
 
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