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Old 03-06-2018, 12:58 PM   #1
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Could use some editing help for part 7 in a mind control series

Iím Desirelit (https://www.literotica.com/stories/m...ge=submissions). After a long hiatus Iíve written part 7 in The Transformed Man series, which is about a man who through medical experimentation now has a muscular physique, a giant penis, undesirable balls, pheromones that make women want him desperately, and cum that when women come in contact with it, it puts them under his control. Itís not King Lear, itís lots and lots of sex.

I make typing and grammatical mistakes. Sometimes I gloss over things that should be unpacked more. There are a bunch of characters and details to track this deep into the story. Iíd greatly appreciate some help.
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