AuralCaress
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- May 10, 2016
- Posts
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I've completed a story that is almost my first attempt at erotica, and absolutely the first thing I've seriously considered posting. I'd greatly value some feedback from a volunteer editor.
Story attributes:
* m/f
* erotic hypnosis
* non-consensual in the sense that this would be very very wrong in real life, but does not contain overtly nonconsensual violence / humiliation / aggression
* 4,000 - 5,000 words
What I'd like from an editor:
* Does the story flow logically? Are you able to keep track of what's happening? Is my unreliable narrator making things too obscure or confusing?
* Do you see any rookie mistakes / cliches in my descriptions of sex? Are there places I could work on making it more vivid or generally hotter?
* I'm confident in my spelling and grammar. I might benefit from advice on formatting, especially for dialog.
Story attributes:
* m/f
* erotic hypnosis
* non-consensual in the sense that this would be very very wrong in real life, but does not contain overtly nonconsensual violence / humiliation / aggression
* 4,000 - 5,000 words
What I'd like from an editor:
* Does the story flow logically? Are you able to keep track of what's happening? Is my unreliable narrator making things too obscure or confusing?
* Do you see any rookie mistakes / cliches in my descriptions of sex? Are there places I could work on making it more vivid or generally hotter?
* I'm confident in my spelling and grammar. I might benefit from advice on formatting, especially for dialog.
