ShirtlessMike05
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I want to shorten my first story Topless Jen Ch 01 where she goes to the beach topless for the first time. People have told me it's too long. I was wondering what scenario would be best to remove from the story to make it shorter and easier to read, the bikini shop part or the music store? Also if there's any other part you think I should remove please let me know. I wanna do this with my other stories too while I'm working on new ones but I wanna see how this one goes first. Please let me know and I'll adjust it accordingly. I put the link for my story here so you can read it and decide.
https://www.literotica.com/s/topless-jen-ch-01
Also another question should I write the story from my POV or Jen's? I've tried both ways and I'm not sure which would work best. Would it be best to do past tense or present tense in the story? I like these stories a lot and I know I could make them so much better.
Michael
https://www.literotica.com/s/topless-jen-ch-01
Also another question should I write the story from my POV or Jen's? I've tried both ways and I'm not sure which would work best. Would it be best to do past tense or present tense in the story? I like these stories a lot and I know I could make them so much better.
Michael